Reviewer: canufeelthemagictonight
Date: 10/25/13 18:13
Chapter: Lost In Translation

I like it. Poor wittle Percy, confused about Muggles...Ah, well, rest assured he'll figure it all out someday.

Reviewer: Karaley Dargen
Date: 10/31/09 15:59
Chapter: Lost In Translation

Awww :D First of all, I really like what you came up with for this prompt. The whole story is just sweet, especially Arthur's explanation, and how little Percy is all confused about it in the end :D

I also thought the dialogue between Charlie and Percy was done really well. They actually sound like little children, not many authors manage that. Also the way the village-children talk to each other. Minor thing though - are you sure that "'cuz" is era-appropriate? I just don't know if they would have used it in.. what, late 70's? early 80's? Britain. Maybe it's just the spelling that irks me. I don't think I would mind it if it was 'cause...

Anywayyy... your characterisation of Percy is great :D I love little!Percy with the library books... ooh and imagine how Mr Weasley would have loved to go to the Muggle Library with him :D

Very cute story. I hope you get lots more reviews soon, your story deserves it.

Author's Response: You're right -- using "'cuz" most likely isn't era appropriate. Even if it is, the spelling is probably an Americanism. Thanks for pointing this out. I'm so glad you otherwise liked my dialogue and characterization. Your lovely review has made me feel all warm and fuzzy inside. :D Thank you.

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