Reviews For A Tangled Web
Reviewer: BrokenPromise
Date: 04/14/12 20:30
Chapter: A Tangled Web

Oooooooo.....nice.....
That was very unexpected. The title makes much more sense now, and it fits perfectly: the mother's love, the cold-blooded murder, the honeymoon and mood afterwards, the Greek connections, the portrait, the flirting, the whole story is engulfing as a spider's web to a fly.
Karis is an exquisite character. So this is the 'Mrs Zabini' who I've seen in some other story and who I seem to have missed in the books...although I read them rather quickly so I suppose that must be why.
Although I found some of this difficult to follow, the end was good and the myth was new to me. I also wonder about the other husbands...and especially whether Nikolas became Karis' next victim...

Author's Response: Blaise's mother is mentioned very briefly in HBP when Blaise is talking to Slughorn. There's a reference to her having married seven times to older men who all died quickly .... I write about her in Lavender, blue (my Blaise/Lavender story), and she's also in a mystery I wrote. If you want to read some more about her, then I suggest trying hestiajones - Desire and a Half, or Rendezvous with Mrs Zabini, or ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor's Diary of a Black Widow Woman.

I used that myth again - in a way - in a comedy - called The Bacchus Book, if you're interested. Thanks very much for the review - Carole~

Reviewer: OtterMoone
Date: 07/20/11 2:29
Chapter: A Tangled Web

Very interesting story! It's sometimes so hard to get into the story when it's just dialogue, but you did great! Why did Tiberius hex Blaise, though? What was the boy doing??? And what hex did he use? And I take it Karis was, at one time, married to Abraxas (however you spell it) Malfoy?

Author's Response: Oh, I had to reread so I could answer as it's been so long since I wrote this. She didn;t marry Abraxas Malfoy, I think he would have been her next husband but he had a 'lucky' escape when he died of Dragon Pox. At the time I wrote this, Tiberius hexed Blaise because he was just a horrible old man who found small boys irritating. However when I wrote Lavender blue, I had it in mind that Tiberius more or less raped Karis, and Blaise tried to stop it but couldn;t because he was too young. I mention this in the last chapter of Lavender, I think. Not sure what the curse was, just something dark that left scars. Thank you ~Carole~

Reviewer: primagirl89
Date: 11/12/10 20:19
Chapter: A Tangled Web

I just found this through one of your other stories. And it is AMAZING! I totally did not see the twist coming; I actually thought she was being sarcastic in the end. Im a bit confused though; is she Cormac's aunt or something?

Author's Response: No, she's Blaise Zabini's mum. In the books she'd had seven husbands who seemed to die mysteriously. This is my version of how she killed one of them. I suppose she is a step-aunt of Cormac, because she married a McLaggan, but it's not essential to the story. Glad you liked the story; it was written for a challenge on the beta boards and was quite difficult as it had to be a monologue. Thank you for the review ~Carole~

Reviewer: inspirations
Date: 11/15/09 6:06
Chapter: A Tangled Web

Well, I wasn’t sure what to expect from this, but I really like the result! If I’d realised Karis were Blaise’s mother in the beginning maybe I would’ve put two and two together sooner, but knowing how the challenge would end and seeing the Karis you painted, I wasn’t sure quite what would happen.

I love a story with twists and turns, and this certainly had them. There was such a back-story for Karis, but when you think about you only glossed over it, hiding the full extent of it from Tiberius. Very well done, because I felt as if I knew more about Karis than I actually did.

“Oh, good, I do hate penny pinchers, don’t you?”
LOL. On looking back through the story for this review, this is the practically the first line I read and it’s so ironic. I love it. Because that’s kind of what Karis seems to be.

It was interesting reading a story with only one character’s dialogue, but I got a feeling for Tiberius’ character by the way he’s spoken to, the way Karis reacts to him. Especially towards the end, I think you really showed both characters’ true colours, and that was interesting. The change was quite abrupt in Tiberius, suddenly not being so keen on her singing and talk, but that didn’t bother me too much because it showed how a few months living with Karis, getting to know her properly, had made him look at her more closely. You could see he was suspicious of her by the way he regarded other men. Although, another scene after the wedding might’ve been nice to balance the change in the character’s perspectives of each other out. By the end, I could see Tiberius as an irritable old man – was he like that all along, or did Karis make him like that? I like to go with the latter theory, though it doesn’t matter so much either way I don’t suppose...

Karis’ advances on Tiberius were quite amusing in a roll-my-eyes kind of way. She was so obvious about it, but it had exactly the desired effect on him. LOL.

Towards the beginning it seemed like the word ‘sir’ or ‘Tiberius’ ended quite a few of Karis’ sentences. It showed her respect for him well, painted a picture of her well, but because she said it so often, it got a little repetitive and needless. I think just cutting a few of them out and dispersing them more would be beneficial – I didn’t notice that towards the end, though, because I suppose they were more familiar with each other by then.

Why would I be interested in him? He hasn’t got two Knuts to rub together.”

“Oh, don’t be so naive; why do you think I married you? And as you’ve admitted, you didn’t marry me for my conversation, which seems to annoy you

Honestly, I think the ending was really well done. Just as the penny drops for Tiberius, but it’s too late!

The way of death was different, too. I didn’t know the thing about Hades and his chair, but it fit in really well. Hades being the God of the Underworld, and Tiberius dying in that way – like earlier, kind of ironic, but quite subtle too. It the sort of thing I’ll only pick up subconsciously [if at all] on the first read, but on looking at the story more in-depth the significance, whether meant or not, is really nice.

Overall, I enjoyed this story. Karis Mclaggen is certainly an interesting character... I’m still not really sure what to think of her – she’s so mysterious, deceptive. Great work, dear. xx

Author's Response: Thanks for the review, Spire. Sorry, I've taken forever to respond, but just to let you know that I do appreciate you taking the trouble to review this. ~Carole~

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