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Name: Amalien (Signed) · Date: 12/10/11 7:53 · For: Chapter 1
A very interesting take on the Malfoy's, and I enjoyed it! Although, a nice revenge story wouldn't be amiss...

Author's Response: Ha ha ha - yes, well, that might happen some day. It's burning very slowly in a fic I've written about Dean Thomas, but I haven't updated in a while. Thank you for the review. ~Carole~

Name: OtterMoone (Signed) · Date: 07/20/11 1:33 · For: Chapter 1
I thought Rabastan was an ass, which means you did a good job :) And it surprised me that Lucius actually cared about his wife. But, I suppose if you marry someone, you *usually* either care for them, or grow to care for them, at least a little bit. Good job!

Author's Response: I think there's evidence in the books - certainly in DH - that Lucius and Narcissa cared for each other very much. (I'm thinking of the Charity Burbage scene) And when they're running through the Great Hall to find Draco after the Battle, they're holding hands. I still dislike them, but they had a bond. Thanks for the review ~Carole~

Name: MagicMandy (Signed) · Date: 11/14/10 13:04 · For: Chapter 1
This so sad, but I don't mean that as an insult. I always thought that the whole 'Draco must redeem his father' thing was cruel, but what really moved me was how far narcissa was willing to go to protect her son.

Author's Response: Thank you. I think Draco loved both his parents, but Narcissa was always the one who would do her utmpst to save him, so pleased you picked up on that. Thanks again. ~Carole~

Name: littlewolf (Signed) · Date: 09/06/10 22:15 · For: Chapter 1
this is a very nice story. it brings out the human parts of narcissa and lucius nicely, and the angst is just enough - not too much, not too little. i can feel narcissa's pain, and her wish to be released from it. it was awesome.

and the depiction of lucius in the end is definitely not one that i commonly read. he's always portrayed as cold, heartless etc etc but i'm sure he loves his family. the way you have him watch over narcissa as she spends her alone time in the beach is very endearing.

i love it =)

Author's Response: There is a small part of DH where Narcissa squeezes Lucius' hand and then he hands Voldemort his wand. I think there's a very definitelove between the pair, and they have that for their son as well. I dislike Lucius, but I do think he loved his family. Thank you for the review; I'm glad you enjoyed the story. ~Carole~

Name: inspirations (Signed) · Date: 04/30/10 13:10 · For: Chapter 1
Ooh, this was an interesting depiction of Narcissa, Carole. I have to say, she is one of the most interesting characters, I believe – she has such a perfect, kind of apathetic, facade, but underneath she has the rawest emotions in regards to her son, and Lucius too. I think you captured that whole aspect of Narcissa’s character wonderfully here.

I like the exploration of Narcissa’s feelings towards the Death Eaters and Voldemort. Looking back on the story, this line really stands out to me – Draco would die fighting for something he cared nothing for, fighting because he was scared. Although that’s Narcissa’s outlook on why Draco’s where he is, at the same time it makes me think of her, and why she’s where she is. She could’ve turned her back on that life like Andromeda, but really she’s always been a bit like Lucius -- Lucius would have sacrificed her to save his own skin and the Malfoy name -- and she would be afraid to shame her family like that. When Lucius saved Narcissa at the end, and because Narcissa spends the whole story attempting to save Draco, though, it shows how this couple has changed. When Narcissa attempts to slit her wrists, she can’t because of her self-preservation instinct, and that’s characteristic of the entire Malfoy family as a whole, I think. They care for themselves, certainly, but Lucius and Narcissa – by this time – care more for Draco than themselves.

When I was reading this story, I imagined a beach with a backdrop of stormy, grey waves, and – I don’t know if that’s the affect you intended – that really fit this story. The way I imagined the beach was a bit like a reflection of Narcissa’s inner turmoil, so that image made the story just a little more vibrant for me. Another thing the beach symbolises perfectly, I think, is Narcissa’s loneliness. The whole solitariness of the landscape just made her seem more alone. I think you picked a great setting for this story.

I’m not sure I’ve ever read any angst by you – apart from your story about asthma, maybe – so it was interesting to read something is a slightly different style, if you know what I mean. Great story, dear. x

Author's Response: Thank you so much! I don't write a lot of angst because it's not very 'me' so I'm pleased this rang true for you. The beach backdrop scene was actually the prompt for the fic so THANK YOU for seeing that. There's a point in DH where Lucius squeezes Narcissa's knee and that says it all for me. They have a connection, that's bound up with each other and also their son. Anyway, that's how I see the Malfoys. Thanks again for the review, Spire. ~Carole~

Name: OkiBlossom (Signed) · Date: 12/05/09 12:25 · For: Chapter 1
I've never thought this couple was evil; the Malfoys just bound themselves to law, similarly to Sirius's brother.From Narcissa's first apparence in GoF, you can tell she's bound; Lucius might be arrogant, but she just does whatever to keep the pretense. Correct me if I'm wrong: it's Lestrange her brother-in-law? Usually that would bother me, but we know so little of his character, but clearly he's about, if not on a different level than his wife, mad. I gagged once simply because I picture him as a corpse in my head. That's just....yeah...anyway, Lucius kind of got screwed there in the end; I never thought the Malfoys deserved their treatment. It is, as you say, for protection. You scared me with this piece. I always think too much with literature.

Well done. Carole.

Author's Response: Thank you. This was a different type of story for me, for I'm not an angsty type of person, normally. Rabastan isn't Bellatrix's husband - that's Rodolphus - Rabastan is his brother. For some reason I always picture him as evil and revolting. Thanks again ~Carole~

Name: ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor (Signed) · Date: 12/05/09 7:54 · For: Chapter 1
This is a delightful story. I always pictured Narcissa suffering in silent angst during Voldemort's extended stay in their home, as well as her being forced to conform to the carnal advances of those above her in the Dark Lord's favor.

I like how Lucius is caring about his wife, yet he still maintained his sense of being a PC Death Eater. It realizes my vision of him caring, just not enough to stop the madness before it started.

All in all, I think this is a fantastic imagery-based story, one I'll probably read again in the future.


PS-Just a small nitpick, because I'm just like that: 'Warming Charm' should be capitalized, I believe.

Author's Response: Hi Jess. Thank you for the review and I'm glad you enjoyed it because I've never written about the Malfoys as a couple - and never sympathetically. I shall look into Warming Charm because I'm not sure myself if it's a real spell. ~Carole~

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