This is excellent. It's hard for me to even put what I mean into proper words, but you make everything about this fic raw and tangible without overcomplicating it. I loved it, absolutely loved it!
Author's Response: I suppose it's every writer's dream to be able to convey raw emotions through their words, and also every writer's dream to leave their readers speechless. Thank you so much for the review, it means a lot to me =D
It was nice to read the story for the imagery and emotion, and nicer still to see you did use my suggestion. I wish you'd left the ending open to interpretation (the suicide warning nixes the hope he literally, physically flies away like Snape in HBP), but you're the writer, and however it's played the final words create a striking image. :)
Author's Response: Thanks for the review! The suicide warning in no way cements the idea, it's just there because the ending could be interpreted as suicide... To be safe =D Thanks again for betaing this!
Oh My Word. BB, this story gets better every time I read it. I love the beginning lines about the rain etching the tattoo, and the way you weave this image throughout the story and Draco's state of mind is just brilliant. Honestly, you are such a good writer of imagery - scarily good.
Ughh! I was going to write a joke review from the POV of Voldypants or something - but I can't because this is too dark and too good for that.
Ooh, I heart D/A + Draco. It's like a keg of good beer that someone gives to you; you can't wait to tap it!
The imagery is so...real! It's like following Draco throughout the worst part of his life as we know it. I'm sure not only he amongst the Malfoys has considered hurling themselves off a cliff after the battle was lost. Not to mention, it's probably the only way to erase the life debt he owes to Harry, which I'm sure rankled to no end.
Your diction is very poignant and carefully chosen, and it shows. Ari is a lucky girl to get such a gift. :D
Great work and happy writing!
PS-Just noticed this, thought I'd point it out. I'm assuming it's supposed to be 'sand and', but not quite sure.
"As you push yourself up, the ground seems to be covered with and and stones"