Reviewer: tc100292
Date: 03/03/11 4:53
Chapter: Chapter 1

This is amazingly beautiful and heart wrenching and tragic all at the same time. Always makes me cry. Absolutely stunning.

Author's Response: Thank you so much! That's such high praise :)

Reviewer: LuLu94
Date: 10/29/10 1:03
Chapter: Chapter 1

I mean "waiting" not "during"...stupid iPhone spellcheck...

Reviewer: LuLu94
Date: 10/29/10 1:00
Chapter: Chapter 2

That might be the most AU story I've ever read. But, honestly, I've been during for someone to write a "if James and Lily lived" story :D Great job!

Author's Response: Thank you! :)

Reviewer: Vikula_P
Date: 06/04/10 20:17
Chapter: Chapter 2

Beautifull, romantic, breath taking, well written, exciting. I think that's all. :)

Author's Response: Thank you! I"m glad you liked it! :)

Reviewer: dominiqueweasley
Date: 03/07/10 21:41
Chapter: Chapter 1

I love this story (and it's companion) and I think they are both realistic and fascinating. The ending is happy but also somehow sad to me.. and beautiful. I love how you managed to keep Snape in character and yet have him replace Lily in canon... Wonderful job!!

Author's Response: Thanks! The ending is a bit bittersweet :) I'm glad you enjoyed both stories and thought Snape in canon!

Reviewer: dandy_like_a_lion
Date: 03/06/10 18:07
Chapter: Chapter 2

More would still be fun though :-D, like bits of Harry's life as the-boy-who-lived-with-parents....

Author's Response: Multiple people have mentioned that and the idea's beginning to grow on me . . . I guess we'll just have to see if and when inspiration hits! I'm glad you liked this :) Thanks for the review!

Reviewer: ron lover
Date: 03/05/10 23:40
Chapter: Chapter 2

I promised myself that I would wait to read this untill I finished all the writing that needs to be done, but I couldn't stay away for long.

This story blew me away. I think it was better than the first one, if that is possible.

Because I didn't review the first chapter ( :( ) , I thouch on some of that.

I like how he turns to drinking when Lily leaves. Well, I'm not a fan of James drinking, but it makes so much sense. He wouls be so lost because Lily went with Snape.

I think that your writing is some of the best here, because you make me feel so much for the characters. In You Told Me Once, Dear you had me thinking that he is Severus, and not Snape. So every time I thought about him it was always Severus. But after I read this story, it was back to Snape. No one else has ever done that, except for JKR. That is just amazing.

In this chapter, I love James's reaction when Lily returns. I knew that he would act like that (mostly because that's how I would act). He hasn't seen her in years because she was with the person he hates. That would make him feel angry, making it that much harder. They way your wrote that scene is great. You didn't go overboard with it.

In the middle of the chapter... that was one of the best parts. I was wondering how you were going to add that scene. I honestly didn't think of it happening like that. I thought that James died in I Told You Once, Dear. But when I read this I realized that James wasn't even in it.

I think that it was genius how you had Snape there. That whole scene made so much sense for an AU story. I like how James and Sirius were out on a mission, comming back on the moterbike.

I think the characterization in this story is one of the best in the Marauder's Era, and becuase this is an AU story, that is so much better. In all of the situations that everyone is in, everything is right.

One line that id good with James's characterization is this:

"I know," James interrupts. "I know. I get it."

It shows in so few words his feelings towards Snape. He knows how much Snape did for his family, but he doesn't want to accept it. This line shows that so much.

When Sirius is in St. Mungo's, the way James doesn't look at Sirius says so much. He is so lost because everything in his world is falling and he doesn't want to face it. The way you have it written is amazing.

The way you have James change his mind about naming his child Severus in the end is a great way to end this story. It went froma dark story to making me smile.

Your writing is just so great. There are other words I'd use, but I'm not sure how to spell them. I'd love to tell you everything that I love about this story, but it's getting late.

I just can't stop telling you how much I love this story. This is my favorite story here. The plot, the characters, and everything else is so great.

Author's Response: Thanks so much! You always leave such wonderfully detailed reviews :) I had a lot of fun creating this universe, so I'm so happy to know it's enjoyed! And I'm glad you liked how I wrote James in this. I really wanted to do him justice in the situation, but I felt as if I were trying to cram so much into so few words, and I was afraid it wouldn't work. It's good to know you think I've managed to do that!

Reviewer: siriusblackhead
Date: 03/05/10 22:10
Chapter: Chapter 2

Aw I loved the ending to this alt. universe! And how heartbreaking is it that Severus had to take Lily's place in the canon? That part was actually quite genius of you actually; I had no idea that was coming. All in all, awesome fic!

Author's Response: Thanks very much! It's certainly a pretty different twist -- I'm glad you liked it :)

Reviewer: hgprincess92
Date: 03/05/10 20:27
Chapter: Chapter 2

I loved it!! I'm a huge sucker for happy endings, so I love that Harry got to keep both of his parents. I really hope you continue with this... it could be amazing.

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm also pretty big on happy endings, and I couldn't imagine killing James or Lily ;) Maybe if inspiration hits I'll write another story in this universe!

Reviewer: preyes
Date: 03/05/10 0:04
Chapter: Chapter 2

I'm impress! I have been reading all your stories and they are fantastic!! I can't decide which one is my favorite. I think you should write more about this AU. I'll love to see how Harry will be growing up with his parents.

Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you like my stories :) It was a lot of fun writing in this AU world, so maybe if inspired I'll write more for it. Never say never, right?

Reviewer: nevilleherosnape
Date: 03/04/10 21:13
Chapter: Chapter 2

Beyond words! I love it!! I wasn't expecting the happy ending with Lily surviving, so that was a happy happy surprise!! Very very good!!

Author's Response: Thanks very much! I couldn't help but give a happy ending; I'm too much of a sucker for them ;)

Reviewer: dandy_like_a_lion
Date: 03/03/10 18:38
Chapter: Chapter 1

Excellent, very dark. I hope there'll be more!!!

Author's Response: Thanks! The next chapter is in the queue ;)

Reviewer: heartachin4harry
Date: 02/26/10 0:34
Chapter: Chapter 1

I really like this! Especially contrasting it to its companion. Very nicely done. Can't wait to read more!

Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked it :)

Reviewer: lily_death_flower
Date: 02/25/10 21:07
Chapter: Chapter 1

great story. its definitly interesting reading htis is james's poc because we know nothing of what he went through while lily was with snape. and most of my sympathy for snape that i had when reading "you told we once my dear" is gone and has moved to james. cant wait for the next part and james' reauniun with lily :)

Author's Response: I'm glad you liked it! I definitely couldn't have gone without writing this showing everything from James's POV -- too much is left unexplained! The second half should be up soon. Thanks for the review.

Reviewer: HPLuver7
Date: 02/25/10 19:54
Chapter: Chapter 1

wow. it was fantastic. I'm a huge fan, and htis story almost made me cry. It was a great story and both this and "You Told Me once, Dear" are great ideas for alternate universe maurauder-era stories. absolutely fantastic. I can;t wait for the second part! : )

Author's Response: Thanks! I've never written anything this AU before, and it was a lot of fun. I'm glad you like it! The second half should be up soon! :)

Reviewer: REMi iS AWESOME
Date: 02/25/10 16:47
Chapter: Chapter 1

That was soo brilliantly written I just adore the struggle James is going to it makes him feel so real to me and I have this nice little movie going on in my head thanks to your beautiful writing!

Author's Response: Thanks very much! I'm glad you liked it and could picture it :)

Reviewer: KPotter7
Date: 02/24/10 22:00
Chapter: Chapter 1

One of the best first chapters evert! Update soon!! :))

Author's Response: Thanks! I'll try and post the second half as soon as I can :)

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