Sweet and adorable. Trust James to ask out a girl and make it sound like charity.
Author's Response: Hahahahahah - yes, it is the sort of idiotic thing he'd do, but I don't think he realsied he was being quite such a prat. Thank youuuuu. ~Carole~
Awww. Carole you did an amazing job!
Rene Luna Smith
Author's Response: Thank you very much. Glad you enjoyed the story. ~Carole~
It was a very nice story!!!! I loved it!!!!
Author's Response: Thank you. I had fun writing it. You may like Veils which is about Petunia's wedding ... ~Carole~
Author's Response: Thank you.
Its so cute!
Author's Response: Thank you. Glad you liked it.
this was teh sweetest story it made me smile. nicley written
Author's Response: Thank you... let's hope the judge agrees and I win the comp *grins* ~Carole~
This really is a lovely story. I love Lily and James, and this story really caught my eye. Also, I responded to the comment you made on my story Shoulda, Coulda, Woulda. I hope I was able to answer your questions. :-)
Author's Response: Thank you for the review and the compliments. I like James and Lily a lot, which is why I write a lot of Marauder era. Thanks for responding to my review of your fic, too. ~Carole~
Oooh I really loved this. It ties in with your personal Marauder canon so well... but then I do hope you're going to give us another first kiss just so that I can read more of Carole!fluff (because I just LOVE it! :D)
I was going to start this sentence with "I particularly liked..." but there are too many things I particularly liked...
First, there's the fact that you took the "James asks Lily on a date"-situation and gave it a nice twist - six times. I thought this was extraordinarily brilliant writing. We get reasons why James asks her out, and we get reasons (a lot) why Lily says no. None of them is just stubborn, you actually put a good story behind the half-cliché, and that makes it so wonderful here.
Second, your characterisation. If I could have any MNFF-writer's strength, it would be the way you write those characters just so very... strongly. It all just fits, and they seem so real.
Remus here is, of course (since this is your story), an extreme wow. He doesn't play a huge part, but I love the bit where he tells her about Hector Jones (and forgets for a moment it was Lily), and the way the two of them interact. It feels very natural, the way you portrayed the two as friends.
And then Lilyyyy I'm so in love with your Lily I don't even mind her getting James. She practised the look in front of the mirror - because she's not so perfect and witty all the time that she can just come up with something like that on the spot. She's upset about James having a girlfriend, because she's not that secure. (and the fact that she worries about not having brushed her teeth properly - haha) She's a nice average girl – but average in a good way. It just all works, perfectly, as always in your stories.
And then the third thing I need to comment on: the kiss. I'm just glad I'm not writing for that prompt because there's just no way to top this – not for me, and not for anyone else. The lines leading up to the kiss and the kiss itself were so so well described, I NEED to kiss someone myself now... It just pulled me in, and warmed my heart in a fuzzy coat of sugary fluff.
All of James' lines in that scene were absolutely perfect. There was no other way to write this scene in this context. You just... made it perfect.
I do wish though that you wrote a bit about James' and Hestia's relationship in a different story. I see so much potential there... And that Hestia Jones *coughscoughs* sounds like quite the nasty/difficult girlfriend, doesn't she... haha. I would love to see James torn between affection (to her and her looks) and longing for simpler times...
Perhaps she is a lovely person though, and I'm just plain jealous! But who could blame me...
This was another wonderful story. No concrit here, at all. Probably never in any reviews I leave you...
Author's Response: Mmm, I know what you mean. I find myself wanting to write more about Hestia and james. Unfortunately she doesn't fit into Lions ... not really ... I have other plans for James. Oh well, we'll see. I'm pleased you enjoyed the story and that you liked Lily. I like the idea of her being averageish in looks - gives the rest of us hope - LOL. Thank you for reviewing ~Carole~
that was so cute, and really well written!
Author's Response: Thnak you. I'm glad you enjoyed it.
Oh that was fantastic as always Carole! I tend to avoid James/Lily but since you were the author I figured I'd take a peek and I loved it! I think that was a realistic first kiss and you didn't make Lily out to be a screaming banshee whenever James came near her. Bravo!
Author's Response: Canon is calling you, Ju-li-ahhhhhh. Heh heh. Thanks for the review and I'm glad you liked their first kiss. ~Carole~
I love the last line, it's perfect! What a sweet story, very well done. I love stories about James and Lily getting together and yours was very fun to read. Good luck in the triathlon! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: Thank you, Gina. I like a bit of fluff occasionally. ~Carole~
My fellow puffs are going to get me all into this James/Lily thing! I really enjoyed this... the fact that she might have said yes to so many of the "askings" was really nice.
I'm becoming a real fan of your stories, Carole, and am hoping to find some time soon to read Lions of Gryffindor.
Author's Response: Thank you, Lori. Awww, I'm glad that Nat and I are getting you into James/Lily and I hope you do get around to reading Lions. It's very ... um ... Maraudery. *hugs her Marauders tightly* ~Carole~
Love it! Really like Lions of Griffyndor too. Always wanted to know how James and Lily got together. Very well written, too.
Author's Response: Thank you ... of course I have a different version in mind for Lions, so keep reading that too. ~Carole~