It's nice that you have a wide range of talents in your writing- being able to switch from love, to dark/angsty, to humor, to poetry... I love you, Natalie!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!!! Keep up the good work, an I hope to see some new stories in your future. :)
Why have I missed reviewing so muchof your poetry. Sometimes I wonder at myself - I'm a right numpty!
This is glorious. The sensuality in your words here is incredible and the stopry could be anyone's except that you've made it Harry and Ginny by use of hair and eye colour.
Author's Response: I think you did leave a review on my PA thread. Or was that Jess? Oops. Anyway, thankssssssssssss a zillion times. I was on a sensual mood while writing this. *cough*
Hey! Nice job! I love your language, and the places where you use some repetition work very nicely. At first I had no idea who this was about, because I am pretty dense when it comes to free verse especially, but then I went back and saw "Dedicated to Harry and Ginny" and suddenly it made PERFECT SENSE. You captured a lot about their relationship in this poem, from their anticipation and waiting to their celebration and consumation. For some reason I especially liked "A night for healing bruises, for numbing pain;" because I can only imagine how damaged Harry in particular was by all he went through. I also really liked the reference to the colors. Lovely poem! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: Gina!
Thank you so much for the review. I am so happy you found that this story summed Harry and Ginny's relationship well. I tried to convey all their waiting, their pain and happiness without trying to be obvious. The colours were the major clues that I left. Glad you picked them up. :D:D:D
ooooh. I like it very much!
Author's Response: Why thank you! ;)
Don't you ever, ever doubt your poetic ability again, Natalie. I've been waiting for this!
First of all, you have beautiful command over language. The way you have structured this is fantastic-it reads like a story yet it flows so well. You have molded this poem into something incredibly real. I think what helps is that your language is incredibly visual, sensual and above all erotic, which is what you were going for, no? I love the way it isn't explicit yet it is. Just stunning.
I love it, Natalie. I just love it. I'm so glad you put it up on the archives. Also, Jess' review makes me laugh hehe.
Author's Response: GO SMUT!
I squee every time you comment on my poems. I am so much in awe of your poetry. :O I am so happy you found my language visual as well as sensual and erotic, for , YES, that is what I was aiming for. When I wrote it, my intention was to paint a very vivid scene (not just thrashing bodies but the room, the mood, their feelings all put together). And yet, I didn't want the language to be explicit. I personally feel that being explicit ruin smut anyway.
Thank you so very much for the review, Julia. Now, I can go to sleep with a smile on my lips.
~Natalie. (GO SMUT!)
Aww, you already know that I love this poem, but I know how much reviews kick ass, so I'm going to exalt you anyway.
Long, tapered fingers,
Undulating velvet skin,
Poetry of motion -
Yay to sex references! It just seemed to fit the bill for a first-time encounter, with the exploration and the halting advances that speak of trying something - or someone - new.
The language is so very pretty. You get the most out of every syllable and really make them work for your end, which is to convey passion and waiting and loving.
It's also seeming like it was meant to be shortly after the battle. As much as JKR would probably want Ginny to be a 'wait until she's married' girl, when the shit hits the fan, in the end, simple pleasures - or complex ones, for that matter - mean so much more. Why wait when you can't even be sure that you're going to live to finally experience it?
Anyway, enough rambling from me. Beautiful work, as usual, and I'll see you in like five seconds!
Author's Response: This review made me giggle so much. Lol. YES! This takes place not long after the Battle because...well, they are in love and over-age. :P Ahhh...we would never know what JKR intended for Ginny. Her girls seem like the type who elope very young. Haha!
Ah, this was one of those poems which came easily to me. (Perhaps because it is smut.) I am so glad it turned out well, and that even you, a staunch Harmony, liked it. :D GO SMUT!
Thank you so much for the review, Jess. Talk to ya tom!