Reviewer: Nagini Riddle
Date: 06/16/12 4:39
Chapter: Sleep, my child.

The summary for this poem really caught my eye, and I'm curious- whose the mother? Is she just the general witch mother, or is she an actual character? I imagine her as Lily, personally, but that's probably due to the fact that she sacrificed herself for her baby. Anyways.... Again, your poetry is so beautiful: "the nights grow long as it creeps into day redder and blacker than they ever were..." "strong is the charm, for love's shield is supreme..." these were the best lines!!! The first one really caught me because I never think of the night as red, but it would be, with a war going on, like the phrase "red dawn". What a great way to really allude to what the war has been doing! And then the second line said it all- that love is the greatest magic in the world. That it always triumphs. And isn't that what Dumbledore was trying to tell his students? Lily (and yes, Harry) proved that simple, yet powerfully completing statement with their sacrifices. Even Snape proves a bit of it, even if his love was not quite unconditional. He still was able to give Harry help and aided in saving the Wizarding world.
Wow, I did not expect to get that much out of so few words!
I just reread the last line, and it, too, is really powerful. Sometimes, it is better to be innocent, and I would definitely want my son to stay young and whole...
A great poem. Seriously, you should publish your work! Of course, not the fandom, but if you are so good with words, you should write on other subjects. I know you would do really well. :)

Author's Response: Well, thank you for another GLORIOUS review! :) This was a poem I worked hard on since I'm not really good with structure. I'm so thrilled you liked it. I haven't thought of publishing, but I do have a Tumblr for posting my original poetry. Someday, I might seek out a publisher. :)

Reviewer: FawkesToTheRescue
Date: 09/23/10 19:57
Chapter: Sleep, my child.

Natalie!

I love this poem! Eeep! It is so beautifully written and I wish so so so bad I could write like this! Man!

It really captures the whole situation like . . perfect! I'd give it an 10/10. I really, really like this poem!

It's original and fun, and the details and imagery are spot on.

CONGRATULATIONS!!!

-Megan

P.S. Yeah, in my last review I signed it Norberta. Sort of a pen name for a pen name, but now I'm just putting my name. Who cares. ;) Goood job!

Author's Response: Hey Megan!



YAY! We can finally call each other by our names. ;)
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I like this poem, too. That's conceited of me, but it was the first time I wrote in some form other than free verse, and everything just fell into place. I am so happy you liked it enough to leave a review.
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Actually, you've been a real sweetheart really. Your reviews make me smile. :D
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~Natalie.

Reviewer: Equinox Chick
Date: 05/06/10 10:23
Chapter: Sleep, my child.

I think I reviewed this in the PA thread, or attempted to offer some crit. However I shall review here too. I can't find a fault with this poem, so that's my crit out of the window. It is a beautiful poem, very sad. I love, love love the way you've introduced the seasons to represent the moods. So sad, so bittersweet. I did actually assume this was Lily and Harry, but it could be Alice and Neville - I suppose.

Beautiful. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Thank you for the second review! :) I also thought of Lily and Harry, and then Alice after reading the reviews. Now, I suppose it can be any mother. ;)



Really glad you liked it! Thanks!



~Natalie.

Reviewer: KarasAunty
Date: 05/06/10 8:28
Chapter: Sleep, my child.

Hello hestiajones,

what a lovely poem. Simultaneously sad and hopeful. Makes me feel for poor Lly because she has no idea what's coming, although in retrospect, I suppose it could apply to Alice Longbottom as well.

*sniffles*

Nice work, m'dear!

 M :)



Author's Response: Maureen,



What a pleasant surprise! To tell you the truth, I imagined Lily as the speaker. But I suppose it really can be applied to Alice as well. :D



Thanks for reading and reviewing!



~Natalie.

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