that was the first fic i read bout cho and cedric.
Author's Response: Err. Well, thanks for letting me know that...
aww....this is really sweet!
That was very sweet!
Hello, Sarah! Lately I’ve written a few pieces about Cho, and it was a real pleasure to come across another fic about her. All I’ve wrote/read about her is set in the immediate months after Cedric’s death, so it was really interesting to see an interpretation of her years on, when she’s preparing to marry another man.
I love that you’ve depicted her in a state where she’s moved on from Cedric. That’s a realistic development on the Cho we see in DH, but more grown up, naturally. It was interesting that she’d more or less forgotten that Cedric was there – sad at the same time, though. In GoF, they were always like ‘the’ couple. Up until his death, you couldn’t quite imagine them not being a couple. In fact, after Cedric, she only sees Harry, and they never become a couple, really. So it’s nice to see Cho in this situation, moving into a new life with a wonderful man, and at the same time remembering Cedric. You’ve struck a nice balance in emotions here.
Another thing I liked is the inclusion of Mark himself. I know some people don’t like the idea of Cho marrying a Muggle, but I’ve always thought that’s kind of fitting for her. I don’t know how to explain really. But anyway. Yes, I thought the Muggle family and husband fitted in to this story rather flawlessly. There was no narrative dressing up the fact that Mark’s a Muggle, and that just went to show how dissimilar Muggles and wizards are essentially. However, one minor thing I thought could’ve been smoother is the introduction of Mark.
This was her fiancé
Maybe it would’ve been more effective to include his name there, or else leave it to Cho’s exclamation, because I think it would make his dialogue tag flow better.
Finally, I have to comment on the first paragraph. :] I think it was really effective how you just threw us straight into Cho’s mindset, and had us right in there with her, but not really telling us what her dilemma was. That was a great technique for cinching my curiosity, and compelling me to read on and find out more. Lovely story. x
Very nice. I think you've captured Cho's feelings really well here: she still misses Cedric and always will, but it's a long time since he died and now she's moved on.