I loved your characterisation of Seamus and picking up on his boggart being a Banshee in PoA was a really good premise for a fic. I would have preferred it if you'd explored Mrs Finnigan's illness a bit more - I presume it was somehow
more fear-based than real, but it would have been nice to see a bit more of that. But as a character piece on Seamus it was great :).
I loved the folky and at times eerie feeling you showed through the setting and the isolation as well. Great job!
Author's Response: Hello again! I agree with you on Mrs Finnigan’s illness being skated over. The thing is, I wrote this in two hours. :O I was writing this for a challenge I hadn’t planned on taking part in, but I’d just realised we were getting five points for participating, so I just went for it. : ) Sad, though, isn’t it? In retrospect, I realise this fic should be filled out a bit, and I might just do that one fine day. Thanks for reviewing! You’re wonderful. ~Natalie
I really enjoyed this, Natalie. I haven't read much at all featuring Seamus, so that was fun in and of itself... and Carole hit it on the head: it felt like an old legend come to life.
Good job!
Author's Response: Lori!Thanks for reviewing! I am glad you had fun reading it. It was meant to be a light and fun read. ;)
Natalie.
Light with a bit of humor! Good job! Very fun to read!
Author's Response: Yay! Glad you found it fun. Thanks for reading and review!
~Natalie.
Of course that wasn't Lavender ... she's in London with another wizard ... we both know that. *smirk*
Natalie, this is fun and very clever. I loved the folklore feel to this, and Seamus' character is well realised. The Banshee's appearances were particularly scary and the tension in the fic was brilliant. I also loved the way you flicked to humour at the end with Mrs F wanting her cuppa and Debra becoming suspicious of Lavender - ha ha. I have a small quibble over his mam recovering quite quickly. I had the feeling she was really ill (bed ridden), so her getting up was a bit jarring. However I also wondered if her illness was psychosomatic and induced only by this myth of the Banshee ... so my quibble is very minor.
All in all, this was great. It made me quite scared for seamus, interested in his character, and also laugh. Well done! ~Carole~
Author's Response: Carole!
I am so happy you caught the 'folkloriness' of this fic. You know I did my research in like 15 mins, so I was worried if I'd screwed it up. And, halfway into the fic, I realised I didn't want this to end sadly, but with humour. And you're right about Mrs F - her illness wasn' t supposed to be that seriousness, but her fear of the Banshee made it worse.
You know what, that is actually my fault. I was so concerned with finishing the story in time I didn't pay much attention to that. I had the plan in my mind, but I forgot to execute it. :-( But THANKS FOR THE REVIEW! It made my night last...night. ;)
~Natalie.
