ARE YOU SERIOUS, the review box cut my review off in the middle of it. ANYWAY, I was trying to say that the only thing I could think of that could improve this would be to not outright name the subjects in the actual poem, but that's just my personal preference; I really don't like naming the subjects in poetry, but it's really the author's choice. The meaning and flow of the story/poem isn't going to be damaged by using the characters' names. I really did like this, though :D Keep being epic! Becca:D
So I'm scrolling through your author page trying to find a suitable story to review that I haven't read yet. And what do I find but the title "Light My Fire" which reminds me of my favorite band in the whole wide world. Then I click the title and see the chapter title and think... Can it be? Upon seeing your author's note, I realised: OHMYGOSHMUSTREAD based solely on the title XD I also didn't know that you had 19 stories/poems up already and I now feel unsatisfyingly inferior >.> But anyway, let's ignore my random babbling, yeah?
I'll ignore how creeped out I am that this is Umbridge/Fudge and just comment on how frigging amazing the writing is. Like oh my gosh, I had no idea that you were such a fantastic poet, too! The wording is absolutely wonderful and it flows so well that it's just gah
What a funny romance! So well worded, you summed it up in just five verses! I love it!
Author's Response: Thank you so much, I'm glad you like it!
I'm so glad you put this on the archives, Alyssa! I love it. It is so brilliantly icky.
Author's Response: I'm so happy that you like it, Julia! It hurt to write this, and reading it must have been hard. :P Thanks for reading and reviewing!