This was a very interesting story, Gina. Personally this is almost the opposite of my own beliefs about marriage... but anyway, that's not the point here, because what you've done fabulously is step into Lucius' character. Just fantastic. Both the language and the actual plot were so true to his character. I had always imagined that Lucius and Narcissa had a big 'society' wedding, but I quite like your explanation, that it was because she got pregnant and then they hurried it.
I loved the style of this, and the way you simultaneously used a young and an older Lucius to tell the tale, so for a fair bit of it, it felt like we were inside the young Lucius' head, until there was a comment from the older one about how he should have known something or another comment of the kind. You made that work really well.
Your language had that slightly formal and almost philosophical tone, not at all colloquial, which really suits Lucius in my opinion.
Our relationship started out honest enough, but our marriage was born out of necessity, not love. It quickly became a duty to our family, a requirement of society—a deception to ourselves. I can't possibly imagine any way of expressing this better... just wonderful.
I liked the exploration between Lucius and Draco as well, and the comparison between them was well-drawn.
Author's Response: Katrina, thank you so much! It was so nice to find a review for this little-reviewed oddball, lol. What's funny about this story is that I don't agree with Lucius's views on marriage at all either, nor do I think that he ran off with Narcissa. Of course they had a big wedding! And yet I was in the middle of a big story about James and Lily's wedding, and it was giving me fits, and I needed a break. James and Lily are of course a bit more romantic and fluffy, and so my mental break presented itself as a bitter, snarky Lucius Malfoy. Your comment about his character makes me so happy, because I really wanted to capture his voice with this story. I think if an author can do that and stay true to the character, then the story is much more readable when it's something that probably didn't go that way in canon, like this. Anyway - I'm glad someone else read this and maybe even enjoyed it. I really appreciate the review and your kind words. They are very encouraging - I might have to try out my snarky voice again sometime. Thanks again!! ~Gina :)
Your lack of emails saddens me, so I decided to pop in and knock a story off my reading list.
You know, I can't even properly describe just how much Lucius's view of marriage in this story reflects my own. I know we both shall forever disagree on this, but I basically think all the same stuff that he does in the beginning.
That being said, I really do like the voice of Lucius in this. Though I'm not sure I buy him marrying his preggo mistress instead of dumping her or worse, I do feel like his cynicism was proper for who he would be after DH. I'm sure not a whole lot would feel warm and fuzzy after everything, including marriage and fatherhood. We do know that Draco revered his father, but we never really saw that reciprocal side of Lucius until they were desperately seeking out Draco during the Battle. I don't think that part is really reflected in your story as is, but in the context of it being a few years later, maybe it wouldn't have to.
Anyway, I shall spare you the rambling and get back to my ultra crappy Ravenclaw drabbles. I shall see you soon (I hope). Heart
Author's Response: HAHA! I can't believe this story is on your reading list. Now it has two reviews. I wrote this in the middle of my the James/Lily entry that just about put me under. I think we had some good late night conversations around that time. I really needed a break from fluff. I'm glad you thought the voice turned out well. I was particularly pleased with it myself. Regardless of whether this might have actually happened, I tried to write something bitter and somewhat snarky enough to at least make it plausible. It was sort of fun. I can't see Lucius giving any warm fuzzies away, so I certainly avoided any of that, even if we saw him racing after Draco in DH; for all we know, he was just scared silly of the Dark Lord or following his wife, after all. Hm, interesting idea. Anyway. Thanks for reading this odd little thing, I appreciate the review! I shall read your Ravenclaw drabbles soon! ~Gina :)
I think its very possible it could have happened this way. They never quiet struck me as the lovey dovey types! Very good job!
Author's Response: Thank you for reading this! I really appreciate the review, since this is a rather odd story for me. They don't strike me as the lovey-dovey type either, so maybe a truly original idea would be to actually portray them as deeply in love. Hm. ;) Thanks again for reading! ~Gina :)