I like it, very realistic. Very sweet, well..as sweet as Draco could be too Hermione.
Would like a second chapter, but cliffhangers work too.(:
Wow that was really good! I loved all the description and how there was hardly any dialogue. It really worked well with the flow of the story. And it is definitely interesting to see Hermione grasping for every little bit of hope like she did at the end. I especially enjoy how you ended it sort of up in the air, like anything was possible. Thanks for writing this!
Well frankly, I really enjoy reading Draco/Hermione stories- particularly in this case.
I like the way you describe Hermione's tangled inner feelings and thoughts and also your additional descriptions of the court room which was done convincingly enough.
The part describing Hermione's heightened awareness of Draco was also extremely well-written.
The overall pace of the story is extremely well-paced and the different parts of the plot flows rather smoothly.
That's all. Keep on writing !
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Oh, interesting! Sorry, Hannah, I've only just seen this. I'm starting to read more Dramione these days, and I liked this because it's not set at school, and it's about redeeming the seemingly irredeemable, (which is kinda like my fic - ha ha)
I like the descriptions of the courtroom and Malfoy's desperation in that place. The touch at the end, where he calls her Hermione, was very well done. A subtle difference but very pertinent.
i read this a while ago and i thought i had commented but did not
first of all its well written yay
secondly it was really cute i really really liked it
and thirdly i think u should continue because i enjoyed it veryyyy much
i really loved it
Quite good though, as you said, it's also short. You have a talent as a writer to develope these characters with description that,in place of boring readers, forces them to read each line carefully. I could literally feel Hermione's struggle. I completely encourage you to write a longer, more complex story: I'd love to read it!
I really like this, Hannah. Despite despising Malfoy mostly, in books 6 and 7 I couldn’t help but feel a little sympathetic for him. For me, this story is a bit of a continuation of the idea JKR represents in those books that Draco isn’t really the cut for a true Death Eater – look at his struggle to kill Dumbledore for example. Through the description of how Hermione views him, you’ve kept me sympathetic to Draco to the point that I hoped he didn’t get locked away.
He was, after all, only the same age as Hermione herself and had been through equally as much pain and trauma during the war. It just happened that his side had been the one that lost. And now he was paying the price for that.
This section really jumped out at me when reading, just because it’s a perspective I’ve never really examined before and it’s an interesting thought. If Voldemort had won, Hermione would be in Draco’s position and he in hers, except she would probably have a lot worse a time of it. It’s interesting to think about if things had worked out another way in the end, everything would be different as a result.
And I really like the little bit of dialogue of Draco’s at the end. You stirred my sympathy for him up, and then I’m disappointed when Draco snubs Hermione. At the same time, I’m smiling because he called her Hermione. I love that you’ve kept his character in true form there, but slipped in her name, showing he hasn’t gone through the war -- the trial -- unchanged.
You know, I’m curious for what happens with Draco next, but at the same time I don’t want to know. There’s a kind of ambiguous finality in that last line that I think works really well to mark the ending. On the one hand, I want to know whether Draco will ever talk to Hermione on the level she’s attempted to talk to him. But on the other hand, the beauty of the one-shot is that it shows Draco has changed, even if it’s just a little, and I don’t need to know any more than that. Great story =) xx
I believe that it was a little too short. I agree with some of the other reviewers that some dialogue in the beginning between Hermione and another character would have been helpful. I'm not saying that I didn't like your fic, for it was entertaining. I absolutely love the ending and how it suddenly took a change to show the side of Draco that we all know. So what does this mean for Ron and Hermione? I'm curious to know what happens next, please keep writing :)
Author's Response: At the moment, it's just a one-shot, but since a lot of the reviewers so far have asked for more, I may have to develop it. If I do, I'll certainly take your suggestion for needing more dialogue in order to better show Hermione's character.
As for what this means for Ron and Hermione, I'll leave that for you to decide...for now.
Lovely! Really cool idea. I liked the ending especially. I would have liked more dialogue in the beginning though. An interaction between Ron and Hermione would have been great. I thought Hermione's inner monologue was well-characterized. Awesome fic!
Author's Response: Thanks for the read and review! I'll certainly take your suggestions on board if I decide to develop this further.
I thought it wasn't bad. Was this a one-shot? It seems like there should be more.
Author's Response: It's a one-shot for now, but may be developed in the future - thanks for the read and review!
Oh that was so sweet, Hannah! I haven't read a Dramione for quite some time now and you've given me a craving for more. This feels very realistic. We know how compassionate Hermione can be, SPEW is a testament to that, so it felt natural that Hermione could be drawn to Draco like this when he was in a position so vulnerable and uncertain.
The ending was a nice touch as well and left it on an open and rather more happy note than I was expecting. Well done, great job!
Author's Response: Yay Julia! Thanks for the review. When I first had the idea, I knew that this was the only time period that I personally could see Dramione working, and I had SPEW in mind when it came to me. In the same way that Harry has his 'saving people' thing, I believe that Hermione has a bit of 'helping the little guy thing'. She wants to save the house-elves that she sees as oppressed and in a way I wonder if she might see Draco as another project. And I felt I had to leave a little bit of hope in there at the ending. After all, who knows what could happen...
My muse does great work, doesn't she? :P
Author's Response: She really does. One afternoon with her and suddenly I'm writing like you!