I really like how the lines are so short yet tell the story in such a poignant way. This was one of my favourite chapter in HBP and I love your interpretation of it.
Author's Response: Thanks so much! It means a lot to me that you liked it. ~Thestral
This has got to be one of my favorite poems of all time. I absolutely love this, it is so beautiful. It makes me really think and it is amazing writing. I think I will go read your other stories now . . . this one inspires me. It almost makes me want to write a poem! You are amazing!!!
Author's Response: Well, thank you! Reading this review inspires me to write even more! I hope you like my other poem! Truly and sicerely, you made my day! ~Thestral
I loved this poem!
The start of the poem is instantly gripping and thought-provoking. That’s always good as the reader is drawn in and wants to read more. Throughout you also used such striking imagery, for example, “though hatred pulses with blood’s flow.” I just loved that as it just painted that picture of burning hatred flowing to every part of a person’s body, pulsing with every heartbeat. In the next stanza, something which puzzled me was the line, “of a hero, blessed, with gun or knife.” I’m afraid I don’t really understand this. How is the hero “blessed.” I feel like I’m just missing the meaning here.
I love the subject matter – it’s certainly not a new or original concept, but you’ve managed to still make it seem fresh and heartfelt. I love the flow of the poem – the rhyme scheme worked out very well. You also used repetition very effectively, for example in “Succumb to threats. To threats of pain in jets.” Technically, the only thing I can see is that you’ve left off the full stop or comma at the end of the stanzas a few times.
I really liked the ending of the poem as well, I think the way you took us into the mindset of the Hero’s potential killer was really effective. Well done!
Author's Response: Thank you so much! As for the "hero blessed," I guess I was just referring to Dumbledore's almost god-like reputation and stance in the world. He means so much to so many, it's almost like he's a saint in his own right. I wish every review I got was this helpful and well thought-out! Thank you so much again!
I love this poem. It's beautiful.
Author's Response: Thank you so much! I'm really glad that you like it!