What a beautiful way to write this story! I also like how it was all from his point of view. And it had a sense of melancholy to it that was just so darn gorgeous! I love this story!!!!!!!!!! Perhaps because it was so real and honest, and also because Severus finally tried to come clean.
How sad! How utterly, completely, wonderfully sad! I mean....arghincoherenceisn'tmythingbutgahican'thelpit!!! How do you do that, make me feel like you know canon that isn't technically canon but feels like it and make the rest of us wonder what else you know that we don't?! Does Severus never had an OOC moment in your brain universe? I just feel so much belief in the way you write him in these various scenarios.
Okay, I suck at this, so I'm gonna shut up now. The out-of-sequence events worked really well, and the fact that you numbered them instead of having to resort to odd progressions in time and italics out the wazoo...very nice. That should alleviate the rampant spamminess that is this review. Actual discussion. Nah, not really. Fail. You win, and Severus isn't a complete bastard. I think Umbridge is my new least-favourite character.
Author's Response: I have a real thing for non-linear stories, but I know that lots of people really dislike them, and this has a fairly odd style to it too, not to mention the present tense, so I'm always a little wary as to how people will take to it, especially as I'm quite fond of it, so I'm so glad you really liked it. Somehow, it felt like the degeneration of their friendship was better shown out of order so that by the time we get to the childhood scene, it feels like it's already doomed when it's barely begun. That you feel like it's unknown canon just made me squee so much. As for whether Severus is ever OOC in my head, it's hard to know because when I write him I don't really feel like I control his characterisation. Someone once described writing Severus as being more like his secretary than a writer, and that feels entirely apt because more than with any other character, I don't feel like I'm telling the story - I'm just taking his dictation. :-/ (yep, writing Severus makes you lose your marbles. I feel the need to do a Severus isn't a complete bastard dance to celebrate your change of heart. :-p Thank you, of course, love.
wow, you are an amazing writer... i could picture everything perfectly! kudos to you on such a heart-wrenching and touching story.
Author's Response: Thanks, I love imagery and emotion in writing so I'm glad you could picture it and that you found it touching.
Author's Response: Thanks! I'm glad you enjoyed it.