Reviews For The Shopgirl
Reviewer: Circle of Life
Date: 04/08/11 16:35
Chapter: Chapter 2: Mr. Weasley & Mr. Weasley

i liked this alot ,only thing i didn't like was that i wasn't able to click the next button after i finished reading the 2 chapter.Oh well i'll just wait

Reviewer: littlewolf
Date: 01/16/11 8:09
Chapter: Chapter 1: Weasley's Wizard Wheezes

i wanted to hit the "next" button badly, but i couldn't find it =( i love the story and couldn't wait to read more!

Reviewer: fatdobby
Date: 09/23/10 17:05
Chapter: Chapter 1: Weasley's Wizard Wheezes

pretty good! i love that this has a plot, unlike so many other fics here.

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

Reviewer: Equinox Chick
Date: 09/15/10 11:22
Chapter: Chapter 1: Weasley's Wizard Wheezes

Hellooo. This is interesting. Verity is an underused character - probably because we don't see much of her - but you seem to be developing a good back story for her. I like the differences between Fred and George. Fred obviously fancies her (tut tut he took Angelina to the ball, he shouldn't have been noticing other girls!) but George is obviously suspicious about something. What is it he doesn't like? One of the answers to the questions.

My only crit, really, is that I get twitchy when Muggle books are mentioned in the Potterverse. Hermione never read any, and although I think she would have done, using a real book just strikes me as not quite right. It's bringing RL into the Potterverse, if you see what I mean. But that's very, very minor and I know lots of people disagree with me.

The other nit-pick is that in the book, Verity's uniform was magenta coloured robes, the same as the twins.

Great idea, Olivia, and I can't wait to read the rest. Ughhh, and Larry is HORRIBLE! ~Carole~

Author's Response: Wow! Thanks for the review, Carole! I worked rather hard on Verity's back story, so I'm glad you like what I've done so far. Yeah, I agree, Fred really shouldn't have been looking at other girls, but he was a sixteen-year-old boy at that point. No offense meant to sixteen-year-old boys, I'm not that far off sixteen myself. The Muggle book reference is mainly to show the awkward juxtaposition Verity is in. She's a witch (obviously) but she isn't very good at magic and she's Muggle-born. I thought something like P&P would be relatively safe. I know about the magenta robes. Trust me, they're coming. Thanks for the review! Olivia

Reviewer: Kaiserin
Date: 09/12/10 21:20
Chapter: Chapter 1: Weasley's Wizard Wheezes

Interesting! Poor thing. Seems like she had not had it easy. I do hope to see how did things go so bad and hope that it does work out for her in the end

Author's Response: Thanks for the review! Verity has definitely not had it easy. Thank you. ~O

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