I loved it! Great ending, I loved how I had to keep guessing who it was. This is my favorite of your stories.
I really loved this piece. It was just so... enthralling I suppose. The way the whole thing is worded really kept my attention hanging. And it was quite a shocker too!
Good use of sensuality and emotion. The pain and longing is real and felt by the reader. The lingering hope at the end is excellently done. Good work!
Well, well, well. I never would have expected it to be Teddy, Fred and Victoire in this story! I really expected it to be Draco and someone else in this story, but NO! It's Fred and Teddy.
That was quite of a shock. I was practically exclaiming in surprise when I found out Teddy was in this story, then I (quite literally) screamed, "WHAT?" when Fred's name came up. Um, apart from that, it was surprisingly good; the story, I mean. The title of this story really matches the content in this story.
Well done (for writing a pretty good story and having the ability to make me scream my head off in surprise).
How sad :-(
I love the language in the fic, as well as they subject - I bet that happens all the time in life, when people use others and they let themselves be used because they can't bare to be away from them, and they try and convince themselves that they'll change but oh they never do!!!!
Nooo, evil manipulative Teddy. Can't have that. He's my utter love bucket. the pride and joy of my two favourite characters. Emma, what are you trying to do to me?
I have to say, I loved this writing, but I was a little bit distracted by desperately needing to know who the two lovers were. At one point I thought it was Draco and Ron (oh wow I want to see that!) then it was James and anyone I could think of with blue eyes, and I was a bit iffy cause James is a bit young. Ignore me I'm rambling ... Teddy and Fred. Mmm, interesting because you have the cousin connection there too. Good characterisation of Fed and through his eyes Teddy as well. So well done for that.You manage to convey some quite beautiful moments here. Fred's angst and his loathing for the situation are really apparant. And the allusion to it being like a drug is an apt one.
Second person. I'm not a huge fan, you know that, but it's well sustained and not too dominating in this fic, but on the whole I'd rather see this as a third person piece. Ignore me, I'm kinda cranky tonight.
Did enjoy this partly because I always love reading your work. So evocative, Emma. ~Carole~