Hi there, I really love your Barty Crouch- inspired story.
I like your first few parts- especially when you vividly describe Barty’s pain, emotional turmoil and anguish. The characterisation of all the characters was also done well. You did show Barty’s worship of Lord Voldemort and how he detested his father.
The mother’s pleas and sadness were exceptionally touching. It is indeed easy to picture how she longed for her precious son to have a chance to live.
That's all. Keep on writing!
Author's Response: Glad to hear it comes out in this story, as I did feel these events very strongly as I wrote them. Ever since I first read GoF in 2004, this day they saved him intrigued me the most in the Crouch family timeline. Thank you! :)
This was such a brilliant story, Benjamin, and I'm glad they've finally validated it! It was great beta'ing this fic--the vocabulary was fabulous, the darkness was there and it was imminent and both Barty Crouches were completely in character and they were 100% believable. I wish JKR wrote something like this because it really provides an insight into Barty Junior's life which we haven't seen before. I'm really looking forward to reading your next fic on the Longbottom torture fic--as bad as that sounds to say! Anyway, good luck with the rest of your fics. It was a pleasure to work with you!
Author's Response: Thank you so, so much! ^^ That was very, very encouraging! Especially seeing to the lack of feedback I've had so far on my BCJ fics. I consider this the best of my current fics because this is the only one-shot and I'm much better with one-shots than chaptered fis. (Though I'm also very pleased with my 2-chapter fic "The Destroying Angel" which is about how Junior joined the Death Eaters.) This site though is too strict for me to bother trying to get anything but the one-shots here. I'm very passionate with the Crouch family and very interested in the author's possible intent with them. I too wish she had written more in depthly about them, but then again, if she did it would leave me less to interpret and vision myself which I enjoy with all my heart. :P Anyway, because of that, I'm so happy to hear that someone feels I've captured the characters that well and that also the story itself is a success seeing to its genre! ^^ And the Longbottom tortue fic will be a one-shot and thus will be up here too. :) Thank you again!