Beautiful. I love the final half. It says so much about the pairing - how they couldn't be together and yet there is a strong bond there that cannot be denied. How you view that bond, and the lengths it could go to, is another matter xD
Author's Response: I dunno why but I was worried you didn't like this poem. o.O I can't exactly remember what initiated that paranoia. THANK YOU for the review. :D ~Natalie
Lovely poem! I love the structure of this poem, Natalie. And the language is very beautiful, just flowing off the tongue with easy simplicity. The one word I didn't understand was the 'But' toward the end. It seems like it should be contrasting something, only I don't see the contrast, if that makes sense. Really, though, that's just a nitpick from a clueless free-verse reader, because I still love it! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: Ahhh...The 'but' part. All I can say in my defence is that I took my poetic license to create a contrast where it wasn't really needed. :P Seriously, though - you are right. This contrast wasn't necessary per se, but I added it because it left a strong emphasis on the final argument. The previous lines talk of things which exist but cannot be seen - "hidden recess", "absent trysts", "communions that can never be tangible", etc. In a sense, that almost negates the very existence of their love. So, the "but" in the final line is an emphatic response to that negation. Happy you liked my poem, Gin gin! :) And thanks for being such an amazing reviewer. And I apologise for this uber-late reply. ~Natalie
Yay, Harmony. I sort of already squeed over this poem, so I'll just leave a short message, since reviews are love and all.
My favourite part about this poem is that it does carry on that air of ambiguity, which allows the reader to really see what they want to see, but since it was written for Megan, it does hint toward Harmony. But since I like weird pairings, I could easily see Draco/Katie or Theo/Susan or nearly anything. It's just set up to mean a lot of different things if you want. That makes it even awesome-er!
Heart ya, Bestia. :)
Author's Response: This is indeed my second review from you. I LOVE YOU! I do agree that it could suit a lot of other pairings since I am as weird as you. Heart ya too! ~Natalie
"one of the most encouraging people on the boards"
Aaaw, you're too kind! Anyway, you know I love this poem. This is my absolute OTP (guessing you knew that :p) Thank you soooo sooo much for this!! It is a great gift.
I love the way the poem flows. The one word lines are awesome to read. I love the repetition too (my favorite thing to do) and I just plain love love love the poem.
Author's Response: Glad to know you liked it. 'Twas written for you after all. :) ~Natalie
Awwww, it's lovely. Now then, if you squint a bit, ignore the title and your author's note, then it could well be Heron.
Natalie, this is gorgeous. You have such a talent for words and your poetry is sublime. Love this - a lot!
Author's Response: I squinted. It worked! lol Thanks for the R & R, Carole. I never thought you'd read this one. ~Natalie