Reviewer: Sly Severus
Date: 05/23/12 19:01
Chapter: Prologue

Hermione/Fred. I like it. I like it way better than Hermione/Ron. They complement each other in a strange sort of way. Almost like the traits one lacks the other displays.

Obviously, this is just the prologue and not much has happened. However, I do like the way it’s written. I’ve read many books that start out this way. The whole looking back to tell the story. It’s a nice we to start, especially with a story like this.

I wonder how Fred will fair in this fic. You’re already off canon with the pairing so you could ignore it further by not killing him, which would be nice. Yet, I sense Fred’s death looms in your story, too.

I really liked this start. I did find some of the wording a bit awkward. Some of your sentences run on a bit too much causing their meaning to be a little jumbled. It wouldn’t hurt to give this another edit or send it to a beta just to make the writing a little smoother.

Overall, a great start to a promising fic.

Reviewer: Maple_and_PheonixFeather
Date: 02/25/12 19:57
Chapter: Prologue

Hello! I definitely think that this fic has promise, and as a Fred/Hermione shipper, I can hope that though it’s been a year, you may someday come back to this. Actually, I was just talking to someone about how I had yet to find a Fred/Hermione fic on MNFF!

I like how this sounds like a memoir. I think that Hermione telling it in such a way could lead to some very interesting situations later on in the description. I did find it odd that Hermione referred to herself as part of the “Golden Trio”, but it definitely not anything major.

I think your prologue acts well as a prologue, because it definitely draws the reader in, and makes them want to read more.

Maple

Reviewer: Literally994
Date: 12/13/11 0:01
Chapter: Prologue

I was looking for a Twin/ Hermione fanfiction and I love yours so far.. please update soon

Reviewer: C_A_Campbell
Date: 06/25/11 18:15
Chapter: Prologue

This sounds promising, and I simply love Fred/Hermione. I can't wait to see where you go with this.

Reviewer: Phoebe Silver
Date: 06/12/11 6:25
Chapter: Prologue

I actually liked it :) I normally don't support hermione and Fred ships.. But this was different.

It was cool keep it up... :)

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