Reviews For Sibling Rivalry
Reviewer: GinnyPotterFan26
Date: 06/14/11 16:40
Chapter: Chapter 1

A lot of people are afraid to write Quidditch matches (even Jo seemed to get fed up with it), but I really enjoy reading them. It's a different kind of excitement from chasing down a Death Eater or escaping a werewolf. I thought you managed to get some good emotion in as well, and it's nice to see that sibling bond transcend the competitiveness of professional sports.

Author's Response:

Well, if you're taking a poll of authors who hate writing Quidditch, count me in. It's really, really difficult to write gameplay in such a way that one can picture it in their heads in a realistic fashion. I personally do not relish the task, but for this story, it was a necessary evil, lol. I'm glad it felt like a decent match, even though it wasn't entirely central to the plot. It took a lot of research into established Quidditch manoeuvres from Quidditch Through the Ages, plus a little revision of my own.

At any rate, I wanted the story to be more about two athletes focused on the same goal and wanting the same thing, yet when one of them wins and one of them doesn’t, their true colours come to light.

Thanks for reading yet again!

~Jess

Reviewer: muggle girl marauder
Date: 06/01/11 21:07
Chapter: Chapter 1

I love this fic. You do such a great job with the competitive sibling dynamic. You make it so believable, and I adore the ending. It's exactly the way you want Weasleys to behave.

The match was so well written. It was tense and exciting, and really fun to read. I always enjoy your stories and am in awe of your story telling abilities.

~Lea

Author's Response: Lol, believe me when I tell you that quidditch is a bitch to write, so that it was fun to read is nice. And I thought my use of the broom worked rather well, too. Anyway, typing on my phone sucks, so I will leave you with a squish. Heart you mucho. :) ~JessP

Reviewer: Gmariam
Date: 05/04/11 19:07
Chapter: Chapter 1

Ah twin, you write sports action so well! Ever think about trying out gobstones? Or perhaps the wizarding equivalent of curling? I jest. ;) The Quidditch really was well done. Okay, so I skimmed some of it, but that's because even with skimming I could still picture it all happening quite clearly. I only skimmed because I wanted to see what happened in the match! I was totally rooting for Roxanne. After getting to know her as a Quidditch player in Wild Card, it was a delight to read her again here. Great job with her. I was hoping for an Oliver appearance but that's okay. ;) I quite liked the interaction between Roxanne and Fred. The meeting at the shop, the goal, the save - all great. But the end, when Fred lets his guard down on the pitch, was brilliant. I absolutely loved that moment. And of course, the last line was a great Weasley twist as well!
Fun, fun story. Well done and congrats on the challenge! ~Gina :)

Author's Response:

I have no idea why I keep writing Quidditch, since those parts of the books always bored me. I love sports, but reading play by plays is just... *yawn*. That's a major part of why I tend to skirt around the actual gameplay, but I knew that there was no getting around it in this. I do think I exhausted every interesting thing I could ever write about Quidditch, though, lol.

Anywho, yay that you liked it and that the game itself wasn't boring, hehe. And as for gobstones... I will fully admit that I have no idea what it actually is. :D

Heart heart, thank you for the visit! Until we meet again. 

~Jess

Reviewer: WeasleyMom
Date: 04/09/11 13:18
Chapter: Chapter 1

I really enjoyed this, Jess. I've only read a couple of the entries, but I'm quite glad I'm not judging this thing. Roxanne and Fred were both well-drawn, and I liked their relationship very much, particularly the end, when she denied meaning the words she'd obviously meant. I believe my brother and I would have behaved in a similar manner.

Good luck in the challenge!

Author's Response:

Haallloooo, Lori!

I suppose I took what I know about being competitive and what I know about sports and meshed them together with my fave fan fic genre. :D It's not anything like Wild Card, but it has a different sort of appeal, I guess, lol.

Thank you for reading and reviewing.:)

~Jess

Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione
Date: 04/09/11 6:17
Chapter: Chapter 1

Hi Jess,

Another great fic! You showed Roxanne and Fred's relationship so well - the rivalry and yet the underlying admiration and love was very realistic. I loved the idea that Roxanne thanked Fred in her speech and later refuted that she meant it... it really fit her characterisation here.

Your detail in describing the Quidditch match was also great, I really felt like I was inside Roxanne's head watching everything that happened. It had just the right amount of detail and action so it was exciting rather than boring.

I also liked the idea of starting off with Ginny's news article and then focussing on the trophy, rather than just writing about the actual match - it really added to the characters, and the newspaper article added to the sense of excitement. You wrote it really well. If it wasn't about a fictitious sport, I would have believed that it was real.

So, once again you've produced another impressive story... I really don't know how you turn them out so quickly and with such quality!

~Katrina

Author's Response:

Hello again!

I decided, when writing this story, that I would focus on things know about. I know all about sibling rivalry (we were rather wicked), sports, and that surreal feeling surrounding a championship. It's exciting, but at the same time, it's almost like it's happening to someone else and you're watching it on TV. There wasn't too much description of the match because, well, in writing the actual gameplay, I was struggling to keep my own attention. It's so difficult to write Quidditch, which is why all my other fics with Quidditch in it usually work around the actual games.

I thought that the article was a good way to get the reader into what was going on without spoiling future events. It was supposed to be like an, "Ooh, how does this come out?" moment. And the scene in the shop was supposed to both introduce the competitive nature of both Roxy and Fred, plus introduce the object of their desire. I think they sort of assumed that they would win the championship, focusing instead on winning the MVP. In this, they're both still young athletes and susceptible to incorrect focus, but they're more entertaining this way. :D

I'm glad you like the story. It was rather difficult to write, but in the end, it was worth it. Thank you as always for your visit!

~Jess

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