This was again, very well written. I don't know how Michael would know that the Order members are in fact members of the Order. That was all kept very hush hush. That's the only problem I had. I enjoyed these chapters a lot.

Author's Response: Thanks for your comments! As for your comment about the Order, Owen's father and mother were members of the Order, and therefore taught Owen all about the group. When Voldemort returned, they decided not to rejoin because they deemed it too dangerous to join the Order, as they were afraid of being caught and of Owen being orphaned. Hope this explains some!

I think this is an interesting start for a story. I like the idea of showing the Battle from the perspective of a younger student, who isn't at all connected to the DA and isn't necessarily aware of what is going on in the wider wizarding community.

Somehow I didn't feel that you quite captured the terror of the Carrows - you often mentioned words such as "terrified", but you don't show much how they affected the students. Perhaps you could have focussed more on Bailey's cut and how it affects her emotionally/mentally.

I think you conveyed the mixture of anticipation and fear that Michael felt at the end, when he was told to get up. That part was written well.

Also, another small thing - it seemed a little odd that Michael only referred to Bailey by name (of the students), and others were described as "the curly haired boy" or something like that - I imagine that after 3 years in the Ravenclaw dormitory, he would know the names of some others, and just that would add something I think.

Anyway, I hope you don't think I've been too negative in this review, that's not what I intended, because I think you have a great idea here which could just be a bit better.

~Katrina

Author's Response: Thanks a lot for the great review! I will definately fix those little errors, and try to improve the emotions of the next chapter. Again, thanks so much! ~Zack