This is just beautiful... beautiful and tragic. The contrast between the two sections is so well done. It was almost painful reading the first part, because I knew what was going to happen to Alice.
Maybe, this kiss marks the beginning of our release. Maybe, there is nothing more to fear now. Maybe, this kiss is the affirmation of a future that is filled with normalcy and free from the insanity of the past few years. I loved this bit. Your word choice ("normalcy", "future", "insanity") was great... it was heart-breaking. Although the commas after maybe interrupted the flow for me a bit.
And the second part. Wow. I'm always impressed by people who can write from the perspective of a mad person, because even though it may seem illogical and random, there's usually some link or part of logic through it. (If that makes sense.) And you just nailed it. I can't say anything more than that it was haunting and beautiful and tragic and just so well-written... I think this is one of my favourites of your stories, which are all fantastic, so that's saying something.
Author's Response: Katrina! Hmmm...I may have to reread the part which you quoted. I didn't read it out while writing and I guess I must have missed something. I chose the word deliberately, and I am glad you noticed them. I'm also thrilled you liked the second part; I worried people might not warm to it. Thank you for such a lovely review! It makes my day when I receive a review from you. :) ~Natalie
Oh god that was so sad. I love your writing here, it was absolutely brilliant and I think adding the first little bit made it so much more poignant.
I still don't know how you managed to pull off writing Alice in part two but it was brilliantly done. I think if anyone else tried to enter the mind of a mad-woman through writing it would have turned out either over-played or too weak, but yours was so beautiful and poetically written. I didn't find it confusing at all.
Author's Response: Ariana! First of all, thank you for dropping by. :) It was a real challenge writing Alice in part two, partly because it is difficult writing from the POV of someone who has no recollection of her early life, and partly because it was so, so sad. I'm super-glad you didn't find it confusing. Thanks for reading and reviewing! ~Natalie
W. O. W.
Author's Response: T.H.A.N.K.S :D ~Natalie
OOH MYYYYY WOOOORRRRRRD! Bloody brilliant. I knew this would work as a oneshot. The drabble was amazing but what you've done here by adding the beginning is make it so much more powerful. Just ... breathtakingly good. Wow, I am glad I picked that quote for the brawl (and yes, that is me claiming the credit -mwahahahahahahaha!)
Sorry, not coherent at all. WONDERFUL! ~Carole~
Author's Response: YAY! I was waiting to hear from somebody who had read the drabble first to tell me if it worked or not. Phew! Now, if only this week's prompt was as easy, I would thank you for picking that quote. GRRRRR. Thanks for reading and reviewing, Croll! ~Natalie
Wow. Depressing, but realistic. Second half is a bit confusing, but I suppose that's what you'd expect from the head of a crazy person.
Author's Response: The second half is the drabble I entered. :D Yes, it is meant to be confusing, but I hope there was some logic in the confusion. Thanks for reading and reviewing! ~Natalie