I really enjoyed this, it was lighthearted and fun :)
However one thing that bugged me was the sheer amount of first year Slytherin girls - about ten were mentioned, surely this is disproportionate to approximately how many pupils houses such as Gryffindor had? For instance there were first year male Gryffindors.
Other than that though I really enjoyed this, and I liked the Greek references.
Cute. But reusing pranks is always a no-no.
Author's Response: Thank you. And every prank I used is a classic prank that has been around for ages. I didn't copy from anyone.
I really enjoyed that :) I loved the Greek Goddess jokes.
Might I just point out that you mentioned Professor Quirrel - from what I could gather (and correct me if i'm wrong), your character is a first year in the year below the Trio? That would mean that she had never been taught by Quirrel, would she actually remember jokes made about a teacher she had never met?
Also I think that the quote "A true friend is one who thinks you are a good egg even if you are half cracked." was by Bernard Meltzer.
Can't wait to read more :)
Author's Response: Thank you. Yes, I had fun picking at Persephone's name. Actually, Persephone and Valiant are IN Harry's year, not a year below them. I figured this would be clear since their roommates, Tracey Davis and Daphne Greengrass are their roommates. They are both "canon" and are both in Harry's year. So, that would make Quirrel their current DADA professor. So, yes, she would get the joke. And is the quote by Bernard Meltzer? The place I got it from had it as anonymous, but I'll definitely get around to changing that if it was him. Thanks for the review. Part 2 should be coming soon!
Great start! Love the pranks they're playing and can't wait to find out what Valiant is planning! Did she buy from Fred and George?
Author's Response: Thank you very much! The two are definitely mischievous imps, aren't they? I'll leave you to wonder what Valiant is planning, but it'll be the best prank yet! And you're very clever. She did indeed buy from Fred and George!