Just came across this story. I hope you can manage to update. I like Xavier.
i absolutely love this story please continue to write :)
Not a bad chapter. I like your characterization, and your writing is smooth.
Now, I don't know a ton about babies, but I have covered developmental psychology, and some things about your little newborn seem off. For one, newborn babies can't focus on anything more than a little bit in front of their face, and laughter is a bit beyond them, I believe. Also, babies' eyes start out blue and then slowly change to their adult color over a few months. You can probably find a short summary of what happens at each stage - newborn, two months, six months, etc - on google if you're interested. :)
Author's Response: Yeah, I used a few different sites to get an idea about the development, but I wanted to showcase that he was not a normal child since he is a young wizard. Some of the things that Xavier does is a little behind his age, but according to the sites I saw, not too outrageous.
Besides, from reading Harry Potter, I got the impression that wizards and witches develop differently. For example, when Dumbledore went to tell Tom Riddle about Hogwarts, the head of the orphanage told Dumbledore that Tom was odd even as a baby. How he hardly cried and everything. For that reason, later on in my story I make a point to explain my idea that the reason Xavier seems to do something that he shouldn't be able to do at his age is because he is aided by magic.
In truth though, I didn't know it took months for the eyes to change. Though, I still like the idea that Xavier's changed so quickly, but I thank you for teaching me something new. :)
I hope you like the story enough to keep reading. And, keep the comments coming, I love feedback.
great story:) we need more!
Very awesome!!!!! Love this!!! Snape as a daddy just makes me smile!!
I'm intrigued by where this will lead. The third chapter was particurly interesting. Voldemort was written very well, though I can't imaging Lucius walking with bounce in his step!
the premise of this story is really intriguing. i am eager to read more. but am glad that you aren't forgetting your other story either ;-)
Another wonderful chapter. Can't wait to see what happens in the next one. I hope you know how much I enjoy reading this story. Keep them coming.
Author's Response: I really glad that you are enjoying this story. Mugglenet is giving me some hassle with my next chapter so it's taking me a little longer but it's coming soon.
Severus is being so caring it is nice to see a different side of him. Keep the great chapters coming.
I am so hooked! Love this story!!
Oh yes!! I'm hooked! Excellent!!
That was a great first chapter. I'm looking forward to reading the rest of the story.
Great story! Please write more!