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Date: 11/05/15 1:07
Chapter: The Birth of His Son

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Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 09/17/14 13:40
Chapter: Lessons Learned, Wisdom Gained -- Part Two

I liked Veta's idea of being Severus' assistant. They can both benefit from that arrangement. Severus is such a gentleman. I think he was right to "discipline" Flynn.

Author's Response: Yeah, I thought that Severus's discipline was perfectly Slytherin and something that he would do. :) (evil grin)

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 09/05/14 14:00
Chapter: Lessons Learned, Wisdom Gained -- Part One

I do like this story. I hope you update soon. Does Xavier have a little more freedom when he goes to visit Hagrid or does he have to stay hidden?

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 09/05/14 13:52
Chapter: The Gift

It might get interesting if Xavier and Harry are in classes together if you take this story that far. It sounds like Xavier had a wonderful Christmas and I think the invisibility cloak will be a useful gift.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 09/04/14 13:50
Chapter: A Wounded Heart

I'm really enjoying this story. I wish you would update more often. I can't complain though. I have a bad history of updating also. I love Xavier and Veta.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 09/03/14 19:14
Chapter: Lifelong Changes

The diary is a great idea. I still feel, and will always feel, such sadness for Severus when he found out Lily had died. I can't imagine how painful that was for him. It's the survivors who suffer.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 09/03/14 14:24
Chapter: Moments Under The Sun

Severus really sounds like a new parent. I remember taking my first born outside when she was a few weeks old. It was chilly since she was born in February and I wrapped her up in so many blankets.:D

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 09/03/14 13:05
Chapter: The Seal of Fate

I'm pretty sure Bellatrix would give everything she and her husband had to the Dark Lord. I think you have the characters true to form. I know how Severus feels when he has to leave his child and go to "work." Every Mom and probably a few Dads know how that feels.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 09/02/14 19:07
Chapter: A New House, A New Life

I like all sides of Severus. In my mind, he's quite the man. I really like this story so far but there are a couple of things that kind of bothered me. Least of all, Xavier sounds a little advanced for a baby that's less than a day old. Or maybe I'm getting too old to remember. I don't remember them giggling or kicking water around that much. But since he's Severus' son he could be advanced. One problem is that you seem to have a lot of typos or misspellings. The writing's not bad but I'm a stickler for typos.

Reviewer: Fynnsmom
Date: 09/02/14 17:15
Chapter: The Birth of His Son

This is an interesting start. It's hard to think of Severus as a man whore:D I'd chase him down but he's usually presented as so reserved. Can't wait to see where this goes.

Reviewer: Dad
Date: 09/01/14 16:23
Chapter: Lessons Learned, Wisdom Gained -- Part One

A bit on the short side.

Author's Response: I know sorry about that but for some reason it wouldn't let me post the whole thing. I had a spacer to represent time passed but the site wouldn't upload anything after that. So in the end, I just decided to divide the chapter. The part two will be on as soon as they approve it. Hopefully within a few days.

Reviewer: Dad
Date: 09/01/14 16:16
Chapter: The Gift

nearly wrapped presents - would that be neatly? There is no "and" in Beadle the Bard I had forgottrn this story so I had to do a bit pf backward reading. On to the new chapter.

Reviewer: Dad
Date: 05/18/13 12:56
Chapter: A Wounded Heart

Just came across this story. I hope you can manage to update. I like Xavier.

Reviewer: selene31
Date: 01/13/12 1:08
Chapter: Lifelong Changes

i absolutely love this story please continue to write :)

Reviewer: nevilleherosnape
Date: 12/25/11 5:52
Chapter: Lifelong Changes


Reviewer: Redwing
Date: 12/22/11 5:44
Chapter: A New House, A New Life

Not a bad chapter. I like your characterization, and your writing is smooth.
Now, I don't know a ton about babies, but I have covered developmental psychology, and some things about your little newborn seem off. For one, newborn babies can't focus on anything more than a little bit in front of their face, and laughter is a bit beyond them, I believe. Also, babies' eyes start out blue and then slowly change to their adult color over a few months. You can probably find a short summary of what happens at each stage - newborn, two months, six months, etc - on google if you're interested. :)

Author's Response: Yeah, I used a few different sites to get an idea about the development, but I wanted to showcase that he was not a normal child since he is a young wizard. Some of the things that Xavier does is a little behind his age, but according to the sites I saw, not too outrageous.

Besides, from reading Harry Potter, I got the impression that wizards and witches develop differently. For example, when Dumbledore went to tell Tom Riddle about Hogwarts, the head of the orphanage told Dumbledore that Tom was odd even as a baby. How he hardly cried and everything. For that reason, later on in my story I make a point to explain my idea that the reason Xavier seems to do something that he shouldn't be able to do at his age is because he is aided by magic.

In truth though, I didn't know it took months for the eyes to change. Though, I still like the idea that Xavier's changed so quickly, but I thank you for teaching me something new. :)

I hope you like the story enough to keep reading. And, keep the comments coming, I love feedback.

Reviewer: selene31
Date: 11/30/11 19:49
Chapter: Moments Under The Sun

great story:) we need more!

Reviewer: nevilleherosnape
Date: 10/16/11 20:34
Chapter: Moments Under The Sun

Very awesome!!!!! Love this!!! Snape as a daddy just makes me smile!!

Reviewer: The Dark Lords Right Hand
Date: 08/28/11 2:08
Chapter: The Seal of Fate

I'm intrigued by where this will lead. The third chapter was particurly interesting. Voldemort was written very well, though I can't imaging Lucius walking with bounce in his step!

Reviewer: karamarie
Date: 08/18/11 23:38
Chapter: The Seal of Fate

the premise of this story is really intriguing. i am eager to read more. but am glad that you aren't forgetting your other story either ;-)

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