Reviews For Bracelets
Reviewer: SaboteurVictory
Date: 08/16/11 19:17
Chapter: Embroidery Thread

Wow! This was fantastic. I really enjoyed reading from Lavender's point of view. Well done!

Author's Response: Thank you.

Reviewer: The_Real_Hermione
Date: 07/30/11 1:04
Chapter: Embroidery Thread

I loved the beginning of this story, because I think it really exemplified the point of the whole story - people may seem one way, but there's usually a lot more going on underneath. The thing I loved about this story is that you didn't try to make Lavender different than she is in canon - and all those things you listed that "everyone" knows about her at the beginning are probably true of her, but you go beyond that and show the other side of her.

I loved the repetitions in the last bit - showing everything she could no longer do after Greyback's attack. I think by using your own earlier words it really emphasised this contrast and made it all the more painful for the reader (in a good way!).

The last few lines were such a wonderful way of showing the importance of friendship and just so well-written.

Anyway, this was a lovely idea for a story about Lavender and I really enjoyed it.

~Katrina

Author's Response: Thank you very much!

Reviewer: Snowlily
Date: 07/27/11 18:21
Chapter: Embroidery Thread

That was sweet and good, imaginative and well written, I really enjoyed it. I especially liked the part about Harry's death being imminent. I mean, he gets into all those dangerous situations! How can you blame her for thinking one will eventually kill him? J.K. Very good, though. I want more! =)

Author's Response: Thank you for the review.

Reviewer: MadEyeMaddy
Date: 07/27/11 3:33
Chapter: Embroidery Thread

Let me just say I don't like Lavender at ALL, but this really makes me sympathize with her. It's a very creative detailed idea- great job!

Maddy

Author's Response: Thank you for reading.

Reviewer: Equinox Chick
Date: 07/27/11 2:02
Chapter: Embroidery Thread

I like the theme of this fic. The weaving of the bracelets weaves its way through the story and gives Lavender a kind of resilience that most fanfiction writers tend to ignore. Lavender is one of my favourite characters - I kinda champion her - and I hate it when she's ONLY portrayed as shallow and boy-crazy. What has worked here is that you haven't ignored that gossipy side to her, but you have reiterated that it's normal. She is a normal teenage girl - much as Parvati and Ginny are (in terms of boyfriends that is).

I do have to quibble on some things that really stuck out for me.

He just wanted a piece of ass and once he had that…” - Sorry, that is such an American turn of phrase that it really sat awkwardly with me. I would change to something like 'He just wanted a grope.'

The other thing is that you have Lavender as a Muggleborn. According to JKR's class notes, she's a pureblood. Even if you don't consider additional information as canon (which is fair enough), she can't have been a Muggleborn if she attended Hogwarts in her final year. She'd have been in hiding or on the run like the Creeveys were. (Colin came back when the Galleon called him).

The ending was sad, but also optimistic. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Thank you for reviewing. I like Lavender, too-- she's a very under served character and needed her own story. Sorry about the American-ism. It's the term I know and I'll look into changing it. I checked the Lexicon before writing this and Steve and his staff agree with me. JKR's notes say Lavender was a pureblood but some of the hints in the books-- not knowing what the Grim was for example-- indicate that Lavender hasn't grown up in the Wizarding world. And you're right, I usually don't use interviews as canon because I tend to miss all of them. Thanks again for reading!

Reviewer: bunnyzilla
Date: 07/26/11 21:47
Chapter: Embroidery Thread

Cute. :)

Author's Response: Thanks!

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