Reviews For Farewell
Reviewer: Nagini Riddle
Date: 10/02/12 21:39
Chapter: Farewell

That last line was so powerful!!!! It is never truly goodbye, is it? I am reminded of Dumbledore when I read that line. :)

Sigh. While it's true that Harry Potter has ended, I for one don't think the adventure really has. We get to reread the stories and also we get to create our own right here! Being able to read fanfiction allows us to keep the spirit for Harry Potter strong! And poetry is included in that. :)

I loved your poem! It was simple, yet had an effective message. Never will it be goodbye.

~Nagini Riddle

Author's Response: Thank you! Yeah, it isn't really goodbye -- I'm still here :D Thank you for the review. I struggled a lot with this one, so I'm glad you liked it.

Soraya xxx

Reviewer: Gmariam
Date: 08/02/11 18:40
Chapter: Farewell

I think this is very sweet. It's fitting to both the end of the HP films as well as your last year of school. You make so many good points, namely about keeping it/him in our hearts. I can't imagine ever losing my fondness for Harry, since I've made such good memories here. And it really isn't good bye since we continue the story everyday. The only thing I would suggest would be to watch the punctuation in poetry: sometimes there were so many commas (or the ellipsis or the dash) that it detracted from the flow. I'm sure you could cut a few without the comma police coming after you. ;)
Nice poem, it made me smile! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Hi, Gina. I'm glad you liked it, and no, it's not really goodbye, is it? We have Pottermore after all. I have taken out some of the punctuation, so I hope it's better now. Thank you for the suggestion, and for the lovely review! It's nice to know I made someone smile. :)

~Soraya~

Reviewer: Kerichi
Date: 08/01/11 21:38
Chapter: Farewell

I love author notes and enjoyed learning what inspired you, but I think it would have better served the reader if you had put the note at the end before asking what the reader thinks. As the first thing I read, with no separation from the poem itself (which is rather symbolic), your note limited my impressions of the poem and made me question word choice.

Instead of imagining a character writing this, maybe George at Fred's funeral, hoping he and Angelina keep his brother in their hearts, I read this as you saying goodbye to the films, and only after deliberately re-reading with a "what if I hadn't read the note?" outlook could I see a different possible meaning than the literal interpretation.

The poem has a nice rhyme scheme and the rhythm and flow of the stanzas are appealing, especially when read aloud (which I did).

My problem with word choice comes from knowing that the poem's about the films. In the first stanza, I couldn't help thinking in response to It’s come so soon, but why?, "Soon? It's been ten years, and you know why--there's no more books to make movies out of."  

Because of the span of years, while I could identify with the feeling of being in a haze of how did time pass so fast, slow down, I had a hard time connecting with the emotion of keeping the films in our hearts when they're on DVD and can be watched anytime. The books are eternal and so are the films. Is the farewell to anticipation, to connection with the actors, and excitement over movie premiers? Farewell to childhood?  

The repetition of time, farewell, heart and goodbye effectively highlight the sense of anxiety and self-comfort I think you're trying to convey in regards to the end of an era in film and secondary school. I just wish I could read about that after reading the poem.



Author's Response: Hi Paige! Sorry about the late reply.

To be fair (to me, that is) I entered this for the Poetry Anyone competition, which was all about saying goodbye to Harry Potter. So naturally, I could only think of a personal poem. I have, however, moved the author's notes to the end, as you suggested. Thanks for that. I'm glad you liked the rhyme scheme and the rhythm and flow.

I must say that as a massive fan of the movies, despite everything they've botched up, I did think that the end came far too soon for me. And I asked why there were no more books, which meant no more films; I, like most fans, want to read more of JKR's work (understandably, I'm sure). But yes, I was saying farewell to the excitement of a new film, farewell to childhood. I hope you still enjoyed the poem, Paige, despite the over-personal feel of the poem. I have changed the location of the author's notes as you said -- thank you for that, and for the review.

~Soraya~

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