Reviews For Potter's Song
Reviewer: Nagini Riddle
Date: 10/02/12 20:58
Chapter: Chapter 1

How can I leave a review for such a great poem? The rhyme scheme was simple, but it really worked and didn't seem forced, but gave it the rhythm that was beautiful.

I really enjoyed the imagery you used, like "helm" and "smoke." It was able to give a better picture of how we are to work together and also that after dangers and trials, there will always be joy.

What I really enjoyed was that this can work two ways- as a send off to the Harry Potter series, or it actually works as a way to keep memories alive for the wizarding world itself, like songs that are written for heroes. I can totally see this as an ode to Harry that is sung for generations to come after he fought the Dark Lord. People sitting by a fire, ready to bring out battle stories- and out comes this song! :)

I noticed that you used "now" quite a bit in the poem, especially in the second stanza. While I see that it is great to emphasize that the past is behind them and now they must do something, I would suggest removing one "now" from the second stanza.

Overall, I really enjoyed this tribute to Harry! I will always have fond memories, and this poem really helps to emphasize those. :)

~Nagini Riddle

Reviewer: Gmariam
Date: 08/02/11 18:33
Chapter: Chapter 1

That's so cool. What a fitting tribute to the end. *sigh* When I first read this I thought, huh? Is this AU? Because I didn't really read the AN and get that it was about the story, not Harry himself. Now I get it and I think it's great. It's about US as well, which is very cool. We are the just new leaders! We will build and mould! And of course we'll always remember him. *sniff* Lovely tribute, twin! ~Gina :)

Author's Response:

Well, it is about us, but it is also about the warriors of Hogwarts. Like them (minus the blood and gore), we pick up and carry on with the story of Harry in our hearts, making sure that we never forget everything that he's done for us. /sentimental goo

I just liked the idea of writing something that anyone could identify with. This poem could be about Dean or George or McGonagall, but it could also be about someone who has reached the back cover of DH for the first time. No need to stop there, hehe. There is so much more in Potter's playground.

Thanks for reading and ruminating with me, Twin. 

~Jess

Reviewer: Equinox Chick
Date: 08/01/11 22:51
Chapter: Chapter 1

Wow, Jess, I can see why this won first place. This is a great poem; I'm not sure I can fault a single line. I often find myself focusing on the rhymes in a rhyming poem because they can seem forced, but here I barely noticed them because they were effortless. You also have some great interplay within the lines.

To build, to mould, a whole new realm I particularly liked the build/mould juxtaposition, here.

Fabulosa! Well Done. and YAY!

~marauderstrike200~

Author's Response:

I'm not going to lie, this poem was slapped together in about 20 minutes while chatting. I am seriously shocked that it did well at all, let alone won. However, after sitting on it for a while, I really do like it, hence posting it. I'm glad you enjoyed it, and I hope you felt the fondness with which it was written.

~StormRose98

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