Reviewer: Equinox Chick
Date: 09/15/11 23:35
Chapter: Chapter 1

Ha ha ha - I'm giggling at this. Although I was going 'wtf?' at the beginning (in a confused way, not an angry way) by the middle I was really interested. I love the description of the kiss, and their discomfort at not knowing what to do with their hands etc. By the end I was giggling at the word 'fingery' ha ha.

I liked this ~Carole~

Author's Response: Hello Carole! I intended it that way, for the beginning. I was hoping it would show Al's confusion better that way. And thank you very much! I was a bit worried that the kiss wouldn't be accurate. And I was giggleing there too. =P Thank you so much for reviewing!

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