Oh Natalie. I've been meaning to read this for a while, and I had intended on leaving a lovely long SPEW review, but I find that I'm just too squeeing to do so. I love the way you introduced it with May 1977, and then finished the same way, so that all the memories, plus the readers knowledge that Dorea marries Charlus and not Issac, feel all the more poignant. I don't believe that you wrote this in three hours. I think you're lying. It flows well, and the instability of Dorea's relationship with Issac is so good.
It's also something that- its impossible to write a story set in the late thirties, particularly one involving a Muggle, without the reader knowing that war is about to break out, and you use the reader's foreknowledge excellently.
This is so good, and this is a rambling review, but particular moments I loved were Issac and Dorea's playfullness, the moment that Issac's son drowns and Charlus thinks its his son still, the realisation that Issac is at war, and is not coming back. And, no matter how much she loved Issac, I loved the line 'There was guilt, too' showing she did care for Charlus, and felt guilty about how she'd treated him.
Anyway, if you haven't gathered from that incoherent mess, I loved this story. Alex
Author's Response: Alex! Oh gods, I am terribly sorry for the late reply. When I get amazing reviews, I am usually too overwhelmed to reply instantly, and then I forget. >.< >.< I am happy you liked it. :D It was written in a fit of insane inspiration and "motivation" and I am still shocked it came out readable. Thank you for the wonderful review!
Natalie, Natalie, Natalie. Would you mind sharing the talent? ;) Three HOURS??!! Knowing that you did this in so little time makes me not want to be friends with you anymore... hehe. ;) Only kidding, of course.
Seriously, this was such a good read. How do you manage to take characters that are little more than a note in JKR's journal somewhere, and give them such a compelling story? What a cool gift you have. I ached for Dorea in this, truly. And then to lose the child on top of it all... *sobs*
My favorite bits were the banter between she and Isaac and the poem, which I thought was beautiful. Really well done. I shall try not to be too jealous of your mad skills. *hugs*
Author's Response: Noooooo you have to stay friends with me forever! I was possessed by something that night haha! However, the banner was where the story lay. :) A pure-blood witch, a Muggle soldier, and canon info, of course. I don't see how else that story would have turned out and not be tragic, you know. I am glad you liked the banter, because I wasn't sure of it. It's conversation that took place in the 30's! :O When Croll was reading it for me, I was sure I'd screwed it up. As for the poem, it's something I wrote ages ago. Luckily, it seemed to fit. :D Thank you for reading and reviewing, Lori! <333
Natalie, that was really neat. Nicely done and original and rather heartbreaking in the end. And totally perfect for the banner. I sort of want to ask what happened to Isaac but feel like it's not a part of the story so I shouldn't. Poor Dorea. What a dramatic ending. You did a lot to flesh out these characters in such a short time. Do you have thoughts about Charlus? Did he know? Anyway, that's a rubbish review but I liked it and good luck in the challenge! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: Your reviews can never be rubbish! Isaac... Well, he died in the war. :/ In some Muggle newspaper, he'd be listed as MIA, but Dorea would never know. I didn't want that mentioned in the fic - actually, I couldn't mention that, because my prompt (the banner) was about waiting. As for Charlus, I wanted to write more about him but couldn't find the space. I don't think he suspected, because Dorea, being the Slytherin she is, would have carefully hidden everything from him. Perhaps, if I were writing this in another frame of mind, he could have found out, but still loved her. Or, they would have divorced, except I don't see a Black of those times divorcing. But I am still convinced Dorea was cunning enough to keep her place, while always waiting for the chance to escape. And he was a lovely man, so she wasn't entirely unhappy, although it added to her sense of guilt. Thanksssss for reading and reviewing, GinGin!
I only dared you because I didn't think you could claim a banner. And thus, as always, you proved me wrong. Sigh. In three hours you produced something lovely and heart-rending. How how how do you do this? You've taken the very few facts we know about Dorea and Charlus Potter and weaved something wonderful.
I am not worthy.
What I really liked on reading this was the lovely description of simple things like her red cloak, and Isaac tipping his hat to her. Later scenes - like the bathroom - were so warm and funny, yet passionate, too. The poetry and his letter to her made me want to weep. I really wanted this to end happily for them, even though Charlus seemed like a decent man.
When you're famous, I will set up your fan club.
Author's Response: Hahaha! I am mad. >.< I didn't think I'd be able to pull it off. Thank you for your lovely comments! If I had the time, and if I had done some more planning, this would have been a better, bigger story. Even as I was typing it out feverishly, Isaac and Dorea were growing into full characters in my head, and I could picture lazy afternoons spent drowning in poems and cigarettes and whatnot! There is so much I imagined but didn't put down on the WordDoc because I hadn't the time nor the energy. :/ Thanks again for the wonderful review! I wonder what the name of my fan club would be...