First of all, I just want to say-Wow. This is simply amazing. I am very picky about my next generation, (at least one Potter has to be a Slytherin, Slytherins cannot be seen in a bad light, no Quidditch rivalries, etc.) and this story fit all my criteria. The abstract feeling, with the song lyrics, was very enjoyable and was perfect for the mood of the story.
I do feel, however, that the word "you" was used a bit too much. It seemed fine at first, but as time went on, it got a bit repetitive.
That is my only suggestion, and I love this story! It was amazingly done.
That was lovely and quite sad at the same time.
I don't understand why people ever put the Potter children in Slytherin, but this was a good take on it, and a good use of the second person. I wish I could tell who the narrator was, but that's irrelevant.
I liked the idea of Scorpius not coming between their friendship, because it made them more inseperable and begs the proverb 'Blood is thicker than water.' But the idea of the opposites was also intriguing.
A really good piece of writing.
Author's Response:Ooh, thank you for the review. To be honest I thought this story was done getting reviews, so....thanks. Personally I think Al would be a Gryff, but people put him in Slytherin because of that line in DH. I just wrote this fic for Ellie, who adores Slytherin!Al, haha. And re narrator. It's either Rose or Lily, depending on who you ship with Scorpius...but tbh it's Rose. Anyway, thanks for the flowy review, and sorry for a rambly response.
Lily xxx
Oh my gosh. You're amazing, Lily! Thank you so much.
I love how you did this. The Script is perfect for this kind of thing, and each song fit it well. This is the best present I have ever gotten.
I love how you told it from Rose's POV. It made it even stronger than it would have been from Al. I love how you added in the bullying bit; wouldn't it make sense that Slytherin become the new Gryffindor or Hufflepuff after the war? Anyways. . . thank you so much. My favorite part would have had to be this.
That was the worst that you’ve ever felt in your entire life. Leaving Al with Scorpius Malfoy and some other sons and daughters of Death Eaters. Leaving him alone.
But then you saw him smile. You didn’t know how this could be possible, you didn’t know how he could possibly be happy. But Al, he smiled. So maybe Slytherin wasn’t bad after all.
I feel that this captures Al perfectly. He had tried so hard not to be in Slytherin, yet there he was. (Did you know his initials, ASP, spell out a type of snake?)
Thank you so much. :) Now I wish I had something for you. :( Who knows? Maybe I will. You're the best friend ever, Lily, for doing this. I currently have a really bad cold, and this just made my day. :)
This definitely captured Slytherin right.
Forever Slytherin.
Ellie
Author's Response: Hee hee. Now you know what your surprise is, right? :D Actually I did The Script because Danny O'Donoghue is a sex monster (that sounded really weird but I'm not going to take it out lol). And Boyce Avenue because you like them. I'm so glad you like it! Forever Hufflepuff (and your twin), Lily xxx
