Reviews For Hogwarts Destiny
Reviewer: Trucker
Date: 12/08/12 12:17
Chapter: Chapter 1

The only nit I'd pick may lie within myself... when Tom sees the Augmentors, I first read that as Barabbas telling Tom about them, not the correct way. Perhaps dropping a name into the dialogue (e.g., Tom explained...) to make it clearer would keep old fogies like me from being confused. Otherwise this was a perfect piece.

Author's Response: Hmm, you have a point there -- four lines into the dialogue before it's clear who is speaking to whom. Hopefully the edited version is clearer. Thanks!

Reviewer: Nagini Riddle
Date: 05/25/12 0:45
Chapter: Chapter 1

Love the prophecy! Amazing how it fits Voldemort so well! How did you manage to write such a well written prophecy? It was perfect! Vague, intriguing, with little comprehension, and yet, from our vantage point, we know what it means! I love that it predicted his downfall on Hogwarts' ground, by Harry Potter, which would have a fragment of his soul.
I think you need to expand this prequel! It was highly interesting, and you left it so open-ended that you could write so many things after this! Just a thought.:) loved this story!!!

Author's Response: Thanks for such a flattering review. Yes, the prophecy is vague - even by the standards of prophecies, I suspect - because it has to admit three interpretations: what Dumbledore thinks it means, what Riddle thinks it means, and what it really means. Best of luck with your own stories - I'll keep an eye peeled for them.

Reviewer: BrokenPromise
Date: 03/02/12 19:42
Chapter: Chapter 1

I really thought that the characterisation of Tom Riddle was very good, and I really liked some of the small touches, especially mufti (a very British word), Henri de Mal-Fois (an ancestor of the Malfoys?) and the Aural Augmentors and the book on them (which I assume Fred and George found and then created their Extendable Ears). I also enjoyed the hints about Grindelwald which connected Dmitri and Dumbledore.
Really good story.

Author's Response: Thanks for being this story's inaugural reviewer. I found Tom Riddle harder to write than e.g. Draco Malfoy, because he has to be unfailingly polite and well-mannered, both to teachers and to his "friends". His innate nastiness has to be revealed mainly through his thoughts and actions. He doesn't just steal a library book (something even Hermione might have done, if she had a strong enough reason), he steals it for the explicit purpose of denying its knowledge to others. I never quite decided how Fred and George got onto the Ears: did they find the book, or just the page with the recipe that Tom tore out to keep, or the book minus that page (and they reinvented the recipe thmselves)?

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