Author's Response: Thank you, once again! :)
Author's Response: :)
Ooooooh, that was really good, Natalie! (Apologies for the continuous r-bombing.)
Despite the fact that Louis is with Lily (hehehehe), I did enjoy this quite a bit. I can't remember ever coming across this pairing before, so kudos to you for writing such a wonderful and believable rarepair.
I think, occasionally with your writing -- and I hope you don't mind me saying so -- the changes in POV/tense can be a tad confusing, but in this story, I really liked the shifts in narrative, from first person to second person. It worked really well, and I think it showed a great insight into Louis's mind.
I think one of the things I liked the most was Lysander's characterisation. So, yeah, he's not quite as weird as his mum, but he's still strange, and I liked how all of that tied in with the title so nicely as well. Oh, and I liked the fact that this "strangeness" is what caused them to get together in the first place.
Anyway, though I don't think I could ever ship this pairing, I still really enjoyed reading this. Well done! :D
Author's Response: I didn't think you'd read this ha ha. I am not really sure I ship them either. I just wrote it for the challenge because no one was using them. :D I am glad that the first person/second person switch worked out. It was necessary to do that for characterisation reasons.I don't mind you telling me that. It does give me an idea of how my writing is being received by readers. Thank you for saying that. I do try to make the voices distinct and leave markers between the temporal shifts. I suppose I'll just have to be a bit more careful next time. Thanks for the review monsoonnnn!
That was a really lovely pairing, especially the way you set them up and brought them together. It was neat to see it happen from one character's point of view, and from the point of the character who did not consider himself gay until Lysander kissed him. I thought you handled that well and it was very believable. I liked Lysander's confidence even more, he was very cool.
I can't help but wonder about Lorcan, and their families, and their future, but that's obviously not part of this story--only I bet you have it in your head! I also can't believe how quick you wrote this!
The first person/second person was interesting. I thought it actually flowed nicely. I'm still trying to figure it out, haha, but it did something to make the story pop more, if you know what I mean. Very unique.
Actually, what jumped out more at me wasn't the shifts in first person/second person, but several places where Louis didn't use contractions, especially after he had just used several. He sounded very proper and I was just wondering if that was how you pictured him in character and speaking.
Lovely job and good luck in the challenge! And good luck with your next one, I'll try to keep up, lol!
Author's Response: I do have the Scamanders' life planned out in my head. :D When I was writing Whirlwind for Carole, I made an outline of it, thinking I'd pick it up someday, and well, you know me. D: The switch in narratives was done because I wanted the memories to be more intimate, and the present to be gently investigative. Thank you for pointing out the contraction issue. I always slip up on that front D: Thanks for the reviewww!
Okay, my heart dropped when I saw this was second person. I really can't like it as a POV because it spins me outside of the story instead of drawing me in, but what was so brilliant here, was that you swicthed to first person and so my interest didn't stray.
This is a gorgeous story. I love the initial set up. Lysander is wonderful. He is so Luna like in his confidence, and yet so unlike her in that he can face reality. I love seeing him through Louis' eyes.
Psst - I love the sex in this. Just enough to be hot, and yet tangled up with wondrous emotions. Gah, will they last.?
Hmm, this is odd, I don;t have much canon for Louis yet, although he;'s nagging at me. I need to get some before this becomes my reality - eeeeeep. Natalie, hestiajonesperson, you are ebil, but fabulous.
Well done! ~Carole~
Author's Response: Haha! I decided on second person as I am writing for Ariana, but I thought the first person was better for getting more intimate with him in the memories. :D Thanks for the review!
Oh, lovely mistress of mine, this was absolutely perfectly wonderfully amazing! I'm in love with the format almost as much as the entire story. Everything - the chemistry between them, the progression of Louis's feelings - was so gorgeously written. And the ending was to die for.
Thank you so much for giving this beautifulness to MEEEE :). It's possible I'll have to join the challenge just to write a thank-you fic for you.
Author's Response: " It's possible I'll have to join the challenge just to write a thank-you fic for you. " And you'll slaughter the rest of us :D I am happppppy to know you liked it, and the format tooo!