Reviews For An Act of Love
Reviewer: Oregonian
Date: 04/19/13 19:10
Chapter: Chapter 1

I'll bet this story never got into "Hogwarts: a History". This story is an interesting expansion of the character of Salazar Slytherin and speculation about his backstory and his motivation for leaving the new school. So little is established about these early times that the door is open for the development of the Founders' personalities and actions in any of a number of directions.

The story cuts back and forth between present (for the tale) time and flashback, including a dream sequence, but it quickly becomes easy to follow, and the characterizations of the four Founders are true to canon, with one reservation.
Given Salazar's long-established elitism and his condescending attitude, it is a bit of a stretch for me that Helga, with her egalitarian nature, should develop romantic feelings toward him (or he toward her).

The concept that he was actually a vampire is an imaginative stroke. Has he been thus for most or all of his adult life? During all of his twenty-plus-year tenure at the school? When did the Muggle mob dump him in the vampire's nest? How was it that he survived that encounter when his own victims do not? How long did Helga know that he was killing and consuming Muggles before she finally confronted him and he fled? I imagine that it could not have been long, since she acts resolutely not long after.

The developments of the problem with Salazar and Helga's desperate plan unfold slowly and steadily. The cutting back and forth between present time and flashback supports the mystery by allowing us to know that she has a plan to do something momentous without revealing too soon what it's all about. A straightforward timeline would not have accomplished the same thing.

The ending is ambiguous, no doubt on purpose. Salazar does not bite Helga, that is clear, but for some unexplained reason she has a sudden urge to sample the blood spread out over the floor (and why is half of his body gone?) But she quickly recovers and leaves the accursed cave. I wonder whether she will tell the other Founders what she knew, where she went, or what she did. Would Salazar have continued to be revered as one of the four Founders if she had told them?

This story is well-written and the sentences flow smoothly (as per the author's usual achievement). It was enjoyable to read. I can't fathom why it has so few reads and only one review.

Author's Response: Hello! Thank you so much for the lovely review! :)

Helga/Salazar is tricky, and in Rowling's hands, they prolly wouldn't end up in each other's arms. But I can see the appeal, too. I have tried to tone down Salazar's character a little during his early days at Hogwarts for this purpose, to make it sound a little plausible.

Helga does get bitten and dies at the end :) The story couldn't have gone on any other way.

~ Natalie

Reviewer: Gmariam
Date: 01/21/12 19:57
Chapter: Chapter 1

Natalieeeee! Okay, it's a damn shame there are still no reviews yet because this is fascinating! What is going on around here? Then again, you have also written a professors fic, a vampire story, and a historical story, and really--if I didn't know you and how fab you can make those things work together, I'd probably overlook it as well. So I'm glad I know you and how fabulous you are and finally read this.

I love your take on the Founders first of all. You made me believe in each of their personalities, and especially in a romance between Helga and Salazar. The way you set up them as three friends bringing in an outsider was really neat, and really emphasized how different Salazar was already. He also had a tragic history that I thought was well thought out.

There were a few things about the time period that seemed anachronistic, but I think that's just because I have a different picture in my head of what Hogwarts was like at the beginning. Creating 'periods' for classes was one of them, as was flying, though now that could have been possible even if Quidditch wasn't a regular thing quite yet.

Also a bit confusing were the transitions from past to present, particularly when the segment was short. This could easily be a much longer story, although I like the snippet format (because of course that's what I write most, lol) I just found the first half a bit less linear to follow than the second half. Maybe delineating the past sections and putting them in italics? I don't know, but it didn't distract from how unique the story was.

Because the idea of Salazar becoming a vampire and leaving the school for this reason was really cool. Dark. Unique. And so, so sad by the end!! You certainly do tragic endings brilliantly, and the final scenes with Helga and Salazar were charged. And then her own ending-guh!! So, so heartbreaking. The bit with the cabinets was brilliant, as were the other small details you sprinkled throughout with facts about the founders, like the basilisk. Very cool.

I know you expanded an idea you already had, but I continue to be envious of your quick, thorough writing and truly unique and heartbreaking stories. Now, instead of asking for a crack pairing, how about something cute and fluffy for the fourth? ;)

Great job and good luck!!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: ZOMG. This is a fabulous review! :D

You're right about the anachronism concerning periods D: I need to fix that. This is what happens when you submit a fic un-betaed lol. About the break in narrative, I originally planned to do that with italics. Hmm. As I haven't crossed the word limit, I think I'll reread that and see if I can make the transitions smoother. Thanks for pointing it out!

I'm happy to know you liked it. I was stretching it a bit with the vampirism lol. It makes me squee to know it didn't sound half bad. :D


Author's Response: ZOMG. This is a fabulous review! :D

You're right about the anachronism concerning periods D: I need to fix that. This is what happens when you submit a fic un-betaed lol. Wikia tells me that the earliest recorded use of broomsticks was in 962, so that seems to be a debatable area. I'll just remove that to save myself the trouble lol. About the break in narrative, I originally planned to do that with italics. Hmm. As I haven't crossed the word limit, I think I'll reread that and see if I can make the transitions smoother. Thanks for pointing it out!

I'm happy to know you liked it. I was stretching it a bit with the vampirism lol. It makes me squee to know it didn't sound half bad. :D

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