Reviewer: Equinox Chick
Date: 10/27/13 7:10
Chapter: Poem

I remember this challenge and I remember reading your poem and marvelling at it. You managed to keep a certain lyricism from the original poem, and yet you created something very Potterverse. It also reads very much like a poem that should be chanted like a catechism.

It’s a grim subject matter, summed up by that end line that the child would be better off dead than cursed to be a werewolf. I hope Remus would disagree, but I have no doubt there must have been times in his life where he thought death would have been the better option.

I love the alliteration in the second line because it helps the rhythm. I also liked the repetition of flesh in lines four and five, which added to the horror of what a transformed werewolf can actually do to its victim. It’s always horrified me that Greyback would do these things whilst still human, and it’s werewolves of his ilk that give the voice of the poem some validity.

I loved this very much, minna. Well done. ~Carole~

Reviewer: Nagini Riddle
Date: 06/21/12 21:16
Chapter: Poem

Great advice! I'll be sure to watch out for werewolves and if I do get bitten, allow myself to die so my soul stays whole and pure. :)

Author's Response: Haha you do that :)

Reviewer: Gmariam
Date: 02/14/12 18:49
Chapter: Poem

Hi Minna! I was going to read The Goblin Market but it's loooooooong! So did you take a line from it to use for the basis or inspiration of this poem? I'm just curious what that prompt was. I thought this was cool. The tone was perfect: it sounded exactly like something a witch or wizard might recite to their children. You are such a good poet. Great job! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Yay, I'm glad you liked it. And for our prompt we were given these lines: "We must not look at goblin men, / We must not buy their fruits: / Who knows upon what soil they fed / Their hungry, thirsty roots?" and told to run with it. I just went with the cautionary nature of the whole thing. -shrug-

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