This was such a heart-rending story that it brought a lump to my throat (which, between you and me, is saying something). Stories like this always hit home for me because I had a grandmother with dementia... And I always found myself able to sympathize with Neville more than my peers could because I had been in his shoes. I had always had a desprate wish that her mind had gone to a happy place, a better time than was then. This piece said aloud all the asparations that I had for my own grandmother and put them in relatable terms. Thank you for this amazing piece of art.
Author's Response: Thank you very much for such a lovely review. I lost my father to dementia so I always have a weepy moment in the books when Neville receives the bubble gum wrapper. I think their fate is almost worse for Neville than Harry losing his parents - but it's a close call.
THanks again ~Carole~
This was so good. I loved it.
Author's Response: Thank you very much. I can;t say I enjoyed writing it, but I was pleased with the final piece and the reaction it has received. ~Carole~
When I first received the drabble for the beta-work, I was stunned. Even though I've had no personal experience with anyone suffering from mental deterioration/loss of memory, I can still remember how hard it was for me to write my own version. But when I saw this, I was so gobsmacked. This was so much more profound in a way I can't explain.
Perhaps, it's the beauty of the phrasing. Perhaps, it's the bittersweet images you've presented us. Perhaps, it's how well you have managed to weave Neville into it as well. Perhaps, it's the absent/present tenderness between Alice and Frank. Perhaps, it is this:
For a moment, I wonder if I should speak, but it’s been so long, and I can’t think of any words.
I don't even know how to describe how that makes me feel. The despair and helplessness and incomprehension packed into that sentence are too much to bear. It's so unfair.
One of the most beautiful fics I've ever read. Going into my favourites.
Author's Response: Coming from you, the writer who has so much beauty with words, this means an incredible amount.
Thank you, also, for picking out one of the new lines and commenting on it. It was dragged from me by personal experience (of which I know you're aware). I just find Alice and Frank's situation so very unfair.
Sorry, can't think of an adequate response 'Thnx' doesn;t quite cut it :) ~CON~
You have amazed me yet again. This was simply stunning; I loved it so much. I don't think that Neville's parents get enough credit or attention for what happened to them. But this... this was phenomenal. It was beautifully written, and had the right depth and emotion to the story. It was heart-melting. Loved it to pieces!
Author's Response: Thank you very much. Unlike my usual stories, I found it hard to add to the original drabble because other things seemed superfluous. I'm very pleased you found this successful. It's pretty different from my usual writing, but i was pleased with the end product. Thank you ~Carole~
This is a phenomenal story - beautifully poignant and tragic. Everything you've added (or maybe had to cut down because of word limits) fits in so seamlessly, and I love the expanded version, especially the part about Hannah standing up to Neville's Gran. So very in-character for both of them, and it was a detail that made me smile.
What I love most about this story is that it isn't fluffy, but it doesn't suck the life out of me with angst, either. It's a depressing story, but we can't be too sad because Alice isn't. The writing at the end is so gorgeous it makes me want to cry. This is easily one of the best one-shots on the site.
When I read this drabble on Christmas Day, I went a little loopy with happiness and was going to type a gushing, incoherent mess in the SBBC thread and then thought better of it. I had my suspicions it might be you, but I wasn't sure and I'm a terrible guesser. The guessing didn't matter to me as much as letting the writer know how much this - even in its drabble form - touched me and how lucky I felt to be the recipient.
I feel like I won't be able to say/stress my absolute love of this piece enough in this review, but I want to thank you for writing me something so perfect. Please never ever stop writing - you are brimming with talent and everything you write seems to turn to gold :).
Author's Response: Thank you so much for this lovely review. When it came to it, the parts I had cut from this originally, didn't make it into this final version because they no longer seemed necessary. I had wanted to expand the mention of Hannah, and bring in Augusta because both are two women important in Neville's life and I like to think Alice and Hannah would have got on very well.
Due to the discussion in SBBC, I then added the part about Frank because I thought it would add something about Neville that he does have this connection to his dad, too, which is based - largely - on constantly repairing his glasses. Another fruitless gesture because Frank continually crushes them out of frustration, but Neville is still trying to make things better.
Thank you for introducing me to the song. I have to admit that when I read your squeee posts on LJ and LS, I was glowing inside. I liked my drabble, but really wasn;t sure you'd like it at all.
Thanks again. ~Carole~