Reviewer: Karaley Dargen
Date: 02/28/12 18:14
Chapter: One-shot

That was very short, but so so sweet. It works quite well in its brevity, even if of course the story behind it could have been stretched out far longer. I like it a lot as it is, with the "present" framing this quick summary of their recent past. You also manage to sprinkle in a LOT of details about both of these characters. It's a wonderfully smooth oneshot :)

Author's Response: Hello Kara!!! Thank you for dropping by :) I think if I hadn't written this as a drabble, then it would have been longer--I'm rather glad it isn't, and that you think the brevity of it worked, and that there was detail without it seeming like an info-dump :) Thanks for reading, reviewing and for your kind words! Alex

Reviewer: hestiajones
Date: 02/18/12 20:35
Chapter: One-shot

This was beautiful! :o I love that both of your recent fics used a non-linear narrative, and did it so well. The romance between them was so delicate - delicate, not in the sense that their feelings were weak, but because neither of them was rushing it, and there was so much fear in their hearts.

And gahh! The writing was very lovely and mellow; it made me think of warm spring afternoons. I could picture them lying there, happy in each other's solid presence, and hopeful.

Very lovely fic, Alex! I am adding it to my favourites.

Author's Response: Hello Natalie! The proof that I can, occasionally, be romantic :) I know what you mean by delicate--I think most of my stories tend to be quite dense, and this was enjoyable to write because it wasn't dense. I'm so pleased you found it vivid and enjoyed the writing--thank you so much for reviewing (and adding to your favourites-I'm honoured!) Alex

Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx
Date: 02/16/12 11:49
Chapter: One-shot

Alexxxxxx. I think you know how much I hearted the original, but I love the expanded one even more :D

It was gorgeous and romantic and still kind of angsty and rather hot as well and I just loved it as you can see by the complete lack of commas lol. And the progression of their relationship was beautifully written and I liked that Katie was chasing Leanne and not the other way round hehe.

Author's Response: Sorayaaa--yes, I did think the ZOMG (even though I've been meaning to ask someone what the Z stands for in that for ages) comment meant that you liked it. I'm glad you like the expanded version more--would be kind of awkward if you preferred the drabble. Anyway, thanks again--I hope my comma errors didn't offend you too much...thanks so much for reviewing :) Alex

Reviewer: Equinox Chick
Date: 02/16/12 11:47
Chapter: One-shot

I like this. I love the lazy image of two girls lying in the sun, and the way this lilts into the past when they were young and happy, then through the harder, dangerous times. It's a lovely story, and no, it's not fluffy.

Okay, sorry I have picks.

several people wondering the grounds, 'wandering the grounds, not 'wondering' (I've noticed you mix this up a little bit)

Second, and I know this is a bit of a dispute, but Leanne was a Gryffindor. In the book, when Katie comes back from the hospital, she is in the common room and Leanne is telling her about McLaggen (you know, Zach's mate - heh heh). So ... despite Wiki and the films, leanne has to be a Gryff. Not sure how many people will pick on you for that. I am canon nerd. EEEP!

Back to the story. This was a lovely piece of light crafting, but it drew me in totally. Thank youuuuuuuu for sharing and showing your lighter side. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Thanks so much for your lovely review Carole--I have corrected 'wondering' (and you are right, I do do that alot--need to keep an eye on it) and changed Leanne to being in Gryffindor, so thanks for pointing that out. I've noticed that I tend to write rather plot/ character heavy stories, and so writing a lighter story (in content and just general feel) was really nice, actually. I'm very glad you enjoyed it to, and that I proved I had a lighter side. Thanks again for the review! Alex

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