Reviews For Definition
Reviewer: WeasleyMom
Date: 10/28/13 17:25
Chapter: Definition

Oh, I like this pairing a lot. I've never considered that the timing would be about right, age-wise, because I always think of her as being older, and unfortunately, he died young. As sad as this is, I think it very believable that even relationships as serious as this one were made casualties of the war.

I like your inclusion of the McKinnons death here. I so often see that portrayed as a couple, Marlene and husband, maybe children. But like you, I imagine it her parents and siblings. Nice connection there with both Poppy and Fabian to bring home the impact of that grief.

I have no crit. :) My favorite part was the beginning, the language you used to describe the moment of his proposal, how she held up her hand and that halo of light... I could see it all so vividly. Lovely writing. ~Lori

Author's Response: Yeah, I always imagined Marlene as quite a young woman and so probably wouldn't have her own family yet. Thank you, glad you enjoyed it :) xx

Reviewer: Equinox Chick
Date: 10/21/13 4:30
Chapter: Definition

This is a great rare-pair. Poppy obviously had a life before we see her in the books, and we know she was there at the time of the Marauders, so giving her Fabian Prewett as a love interest was a great idea. I thought the chemistry between them was nicely written. They were obviously in love, but also they realised the seriousness of the situation. Their level-headedness stopped them doing anything rash - like marriage - but made it heartbreaking to read because we know the endgame of Fabian’s death. Poppy’s friendship with Maria made everything that bit more poignant, as well.

I don’t have any particular criticisms for the story except that in parts it was a little difficult to read because you jumped to their different meetings, but it appeared to be a continuous conversation. It just needed a little spacing out so it was clearer that these were separate occasions.

But that really was a very minor quibble. Lovely story, Spire. ~Carole~

Author's Response: Thanks Carole, I really enjoyed writing this one, and I've always been intriqued by Madam Pomfrey's back story :) xx

Reviewer: xxbabewithbrainsxx
Date: 03/03/12 12:55
Chapter: Definition

Ooooooh, Spire, this was lovely! It's so unfair that this hasn't got any reviews yet, because I thought it was fab and bittersweet and beautiful.

Firstly, what a wonderful rarepair! I never would have thought that Poppy would be Marauder Era age, but because it's never really mentioned how old she is in canon (I don't think so anyway) I suppose you have free reign in that respect. And though the characters in this pairing are rather random, I think you created lovely chemistry between them right from the very beginning when he proposes to her. That was so sweet, and a great way of starting the story, with dialogue.

And I thought the way they were slowly pushed apart by war was so sad and beautifully done. I couldn't help but wince every time a death was mentioned, especially the McKinnons. The fact that Maria was pregnant at the time only makes it more heart-wrenching for me.

Anyway, I hope you get more reviews for this, Spire, because it truly is a fantastic story. See you in, RAC, and good luck in the challenge!

~Soraya~

Author's Response: Ahhh, thank you for the review! I really enjoyed writing this (I haven't written ff in ages and this is a bit different to my norm) so I'm pleased you liked it :) xx

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