That was brilliant. Horrible! But brilliant. Well done.

Hi Lily :)

I do think it's a bit of an injustice that this story has only one review :-/ The review situation on the archives generally hasn't been all that :( But, anywho, I'm here to rectify that.

I must say, I wasn't sure what to think with that pairing. I mean, both characters were ones I don't particularly like (but who does, lol?) but can definitely say that you did well with their characterisation. I liked how you described Umbridge as not pretty but as someone who stood out. That was an interesting observation to make, I think.

I wasn't quite sure about the ending. Rape, or dubious consent if that's what you consider it to be, is a sensitive issue (as, of course, I'm sure you know) and I kind of think you glossed over the matter a little.I think you could have covered what happened after the rape took place, or maybe go into more detail about *why* Amycus decided to do what he did. I think that would make a big difference in the fic.

Anyway, despite my qualms, this was certainly an interesting read, Lily. Good luck in the challenge :)

Author's Response:

Hola, mi amigo, y gracias para en "review". That kinda ruined the whole Spanish thing, I don’t know how to say review :)

Thank you for compliments and crit. I appreciate them both. I love love love love you for saying that I did a good job on characterisation…I think part of the reason I wanted to write about this is because I don’t like either of the characters and I kind of wanted to see how I could write about them objectively.

I agree with you about the crit…all I can say is the same thing I said to Natalie…I didn’t WANT to know what happened next. Perhaps, under less time constraints, I will edit this story and add some more, or perhaps have a sequel, because I’m becoming more and more curious about the details. Which is *really* bad.

Thank you for reviewing, you made my day, because I still don’t get gazillions of reviews, hehe.

Lily xxx