I love this (and am wondering why I haven't reviewed before) Your use of language, flow and rhythm is incredibly good. I love the way you've woven a mysterious story into this, that's both frightening and intriguing. The atmosphere is so dark and you've kept a certain amount of tension going without sacrificing any of your usual lyricism.
I shuddered at the third part of this on discovering the horror of the Department of Mysteries. This is so imaginative and well-written. Well done. ~Carole~
Author's Response: Thank you so much, Carole. <3 (Can you tell I'm always at a loss to respond to praise intelligently? I just melt into a big puddle of squee).
You have a great abstract style! And what a gift with words! Great job.
Author's Response: Thank you. :)
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OMP Minna. I have to admit that I scrolled right down to the third part, the one I didn't know yet, because I had to know how you'd work the plot into this.
But I went back up to read the rest, and you've done this just beautifully. I know nothing of poetic techniques, but whatever you've used here for rhyming/meter, it makes this all seem so appropriately mysterious. It's really impossible to stop reading at any point.
You've done such a great job conveying the images and the plot idea... of course it's vague, it's a poem, but you give it just enough detail to get my mind working, and those details just reinforce the horror of what went on down there.
I love this!
Author's Response: Thank you, Kara. <33 (Honestly the rhyming is a semi-random every-other-line rhyme scheme and the meter was...trying to make it flow? Yay freeverse~)