When are the next chapter coming? I love the concept. The style is very good too.
Author's Response: Thank for the review. All the chapters are now up.
Wow, that was really well-written and engaging. I loved the switching from past to present, that worked amazingly well. This was such a beautifully written story! The end was slightly dissatisfying, though, as I don't think Neville would be the type to "do" anything.
Enjoyed this very much. In one of her interviews Jo said that the hardest thing for her was writing Quidditch matches. So you have accomplished what even she found difficult quite nicely, as the quidditch match is really well done.
However I, like another reviewer, found the ending rather abrupt.
Author's Response: Well, one of the reasons the ending seems so abrupt is that the four of us were writing this in turns of 100 words rather close towards a deadline. Also, the challenge really only was supposed to entail the Quidditch match and a bit around that, and ours was too plotty as it was -- so that's the pragmatic reason why it seems a bit cut off.
Of course, that's not really an excuse though. The thing is, there is no real closure to this story because the students at Hogwarts around that time had no closure. The prospect of taking revenge on the people who betrayed them is all they get for the moment. Life for them is getting through one torture and one interrogation after another. So, in a way, the story has no "proper" ending because there isn't a proper ending to it. Their struggle continues for months and months.
Though of course you do have a point in that an actual ending makes the story rounder and gives the reader more satisfaction and a better feeling of closure. For several reasons, technical and plot-wise, it sadly wasn't possible here. But it's something we'll consider when/if there's another inter-house QWC and we get to write together again!
Thank you very much for the review and the concrit :)
This story won the QWC because of the superb plotting and the way you flew as a team. jsyk.
I remember the only issue we had was that the plot took over slightly from the actual match, but in a fic that doesn;t matter. You need a plot, and this story has one in abundance. It's also exciting and your characterisation,all the way through is superb - particularly of Neville.
Oh, canon nerdity strikes - you may hex me.
“He’s lying!” gasped Neville. “He’s just trying to pay me back for not letting him copy my Potion notes.”
Neither Neville nor Zach took Potions at NEWT level.
I'm not sure I agree with the previous reviewer about the ending. Although there is an abruptness there, it seems fitting and I'm not sure what could have been gained from expanding that moment and that revelation. It leaves us with something to take with us. I also know how close to the wire you were with posting this, so I'm not going to complain because you finished and in my mind this is complete and does you all justice.
I shall stop gushing. The prompt asked for rebellion, and you gave us that. Well done. Superb match. ~Carole~
Loved the concept and storyline. Hate the ending...just doesn't have much resolve. Feels like there should be a third chapter.
Pretty good! I really like the thought of the DA organizing a Quidditch match, as I imagine that the season being cancelled would have been one of the worst changes to life at Hogwarts that the Carrows made (not counting the torture, of course). Excited for the next chapter, keep it up!
Author's Response: Thank you very much for your review! The second (and final) chapter is up now. Hope you enjoy it!