I dare to review! And I found this so touching! I loved the imagery in the first stanza, last line: velvet, fiery plume! Beautiful job!!!!!!
You know I love this, but it bears repeating. Your Ron is love, and I really think the bit you added after "save going back" is just wonderful. You've captured this moment brilliantly.
Author's Response:I'm glad you liked it. It was remarkably easy to write, oddly enough. :D
Thanks for the visit/review. *hugs*
~Jess
Nice!! I like it. I especially liked 'the boy who left' - that was brilliant. That really brought it home, that whole last stanza. Your poems always flow so well. I love them all! Great job!
~Gina :)
Author's Response:Holaaaaaaa!
One thing about Ron in this era is that I get how he feels about himself for leaving, because it's kind of how *I* feel about him leaving. It's probably not fair of me, but there ya go.
I actually wrote that last stanza first, because it was the one which struck me with the inspiration for the whole thing. It was also one of the few things that remained intact between the first coming of this poem, the second version, and this final draft of it. I thought it was the most vital one. And as for flow, I seem to adhere to iambic pentameter for the hell of it. It causes me no end of rawr, but hehe...it is what it is.
Thanks for the review, Twin!
~Jess
Not bad, a little short for my taste, I usually have 200 words in the poems I wright, but that in no way makes this a bad poem.
Author's Response:Not bad, a little vague for my taste. I usually like relevant comments in the reviews I get, but that in no way makes this a bad review. /snark
Thanks for reading. :D
~Jess
This poem is beautiful; I'm jealous of your skill! The rhymes are really good and not cheesy or cliche. The whole poem flows easily and you get a realistic and really good sense of how Ron feels.
Author's Response:Hello!
I'm glad you enjoyed the poem. It was remarkably easy to write, even with a character I don't often write. It's nice to know it worked out okay and that you enjoyed it. Thank you for reading!
~Jess
I DARE!!!!
For I am CROLLLL - Mistress of the Universe (but sadly inadequate at reviewing poetry *sigh*)
Jess, I loved this. I think you captured Ron's state of mind very well in this poem, and the turmoil in his head is very evident. I know how much you hate the fact that he stormed out on them, so the fact that you were able to get inside his head and let us sympathise, made me smile and sigh and want to pat you on the back for being lovely. (Or did Lori threaten to hex you?)
This flows very well, and the rhyming doesn't seem at all forced. Really enjoyed reading it. Lovely!
~Carole~
Author's Response:Oh, Crolla d'Ebil! How I fear thee, Mistress of the Universe!
You know Ron isn't on my list of beloved characters, but I like to think that I can crawl into anyone's mind and see how it ticks and unearth motivations, even if I don't sympathise or agree with them. Ron is a perfect example of this, because Lori told me I characterise him well, even if I don't like him. Oh well...'tis life, I suppose.
Thanks for the review! *squishes*
~Jess
