Whoa! First of all, the timeline doesn't match up, but for the purpose of the story, that's okay. Ginny...crumbling? She was so full of life, and so healthy, that I find it hard to believe.
Anyway, all was good, and then - BAM? - there's a little Neville/Ginny insinuation?? Not undue, just completely unhinted at throughout the story, inconsistant.
Author's Response: I'm not entirely sure which bit you didn't think matched up with the timeline, but that's okay. Artistic licence and all that. I think the thing with Ginny is that she's always been surrounded by people who love her, so when she's alone at Hogwarts, fearing for the lives of her brother and the boy she loves, I don't think you can necessarily expect her to cope. All she really wanted to know was that Harry was alive and evading capture, which with the post and newspapers being withheld by the Carrows she didn't get to know. I'm sorry the Neville/Ginny came as a shock to you, however I felt it wasn't completely out of the blue, as Neville was so fiercely trying to protect her, and it was hinted at all along. Thank you for the review :) Fenella x
Hi Fenella :)
You've reviewed so much of my work that I thought it was about time I returned the favour! :) I think this is a great first fic, definitely better than my first one (please don't read it, lol). I've always wondered how Ginny would have coped during DH without Harry, and I think you showed how crippled she was emotionally because of his absence, and because she had no idea where he was or if he was even alive. It's a horrible situation to be in, and her feelings just sing through this piece.
I also thought it was interesting that Neville was narrating this -- at first, it was a little difficult getting into it because of the first person and everything, but I soon was sucked in. And I loved the title :)
Finally, I felt so sorry for poor Neville when it was revealed at the end that he fancied Ginny :( I mean, I kind of guessed it, because of how he described Ginny's body and her curves and whatever, but still, it was sad.
Anyway, this was a great first fic! I enjoyed it, and it deserves more than just one review (or two, once I've reviewed it). But reviews are becoming harder to receive nowadays because the fandom's dwindling >.< I'll be keeping my eye out for any new stories by you, though, Fenella! Well done. :)
Author's Response: Hi Soraya, Thank you so much! It's lovely to here some feedback on this as the more I look back on it the more faults I find with it! I played around with the first person a lot, originally it was third person but I didn't think it quite captured the importance of Neville's role in this, especially not his feelings towards her. I've always suspected Neville had a bit of a crush on Ginny, he did ask her to the Yule ball after all, however I don't think it's something he'd have ever acted on, and I really wanted to portray the fact he was putting her first, that he would rather she was happy than him, which I think is a big part of his personality. They must have all suffered so much whilst the trio were on the run, I think this is often forgotten. Thank you so much for your lovely review :) Fenella x
I loveeee. I never really thought about them being friends and whatnot at hogwarts, once the others were gone.
Author's Response: Thank you :) I've always interpreted it that Ginny, Neville and Luna were very close, not only because they were fighting against the Carrows together but also because they needed each other to lean on as everyone else had left.