I think I have reviewed this before, but I have to again. If I were James (and a boy, for that matter), I would kill Sirius. But Lily is going out with him now, so maybe only a slight maiming. James never meant to kill, only to harm or siriusly injure.
Author's Response: You have reviewed before, but I'm no less grateful for this one because of it :) Ah, I do love a good Sirius pun. Yep, I think James might have to slightly maim Sirius later, but Madame Pomfrey will fix him up again in a jiffy :p All that matters is that James and Lily are together. Thanks, Krista!
Did Sirius do that to get them together? It seems like something he would do. Great characterization of all the characters. Good job!
Author's Response: Thank you! I'm glad you liked it. Sirius was hoping for the exact outcome he got, although I'm not sure he would have predicted the Hogsmeade trip. He was fed up of seeing James mooning over Lily and not doing anything, so he came up with this prank to try and kick start things. Of course, he didn't ever consider that it could merely have resulted in a lot of awkwardness between the two of them, or that Lily could have got angry and blamed James, but that's Sirius through and through. He's just lucky that I want Lily and James to get together just as much as he does! ~Sophie
heehee...that was really cute. a broom closet would not be my idea of their first kiss, but it works despite its unflatteringness. The sort of change of viewpoint was clear and effective. Lily giggling just made my day.
Sorry this is such a short and rubbish review, but it was just a sweet piece.
Author's Response: Awww, thank you :) I don't suppose I would like to think of their first kiss being in a broom cupboard either, but the scenario popped into my head and I couldn't resist. I like giggling!Lily too, and I just hope she didn't seem OOC. A short review is way better than no review at all, so it is much appreciated. -Sophie-
I thought this was very bubbly and fun! I am sucker for J/L in general (my OTP), and I'm honour bound to click on one when I come across one, and I wasn't disappointed. :) The essence of the ship was nicely caught in very few words. I loved the prank - oh Sirius - and the ending was definitely well-done, especially the usage of the title.
One nitpick is that there were a few missing punctuation (commas and full-stops). They didn't take anything away from the story itself, but minor things like this are hard to ignore.
I hope you write more fanfic in the near future!
Author's Response: Thank you for the review Natalie. I'm glad you enjoyed it. Sorry about the missing punctuation though. *runs off to fix it looking embarrassed* I have a few more L/J plot bunnies bouncing around in my head (they're my OTP too) so hopefully you’ll be seeing more from me soon. No promises though - I have a feeling RL could get in the way. Oh yeah, and "very few words" tends to be my thing. I never finish the longer works :P -Sophie-
That was very cute! I could totally see Sirius pulling something like that and locking them in a broom closet together. I wonder if the blonde was in on it too? Good detail about Peter helping out. I could see that happening, though not Remus.
James and Lily's reactions were good, too. You set up her kissing him back with all her thoughts through the first section so it wasn't too out of the blue. I loved this line from her: "I suppose you can’t help having had poor taste in friends in your first year. You’re stuck with him now." That's perfect! Haha!
Finally, I thought the way you tied the title to the last line was great. It made it really come full circle and made Lily's unusual acceptance of the kiss and the trip to Hogsmeade more believable.
I love a nice James/Lily story so I enjoyed reading yours! ~Gina :)
Author's Response: Awww thank you Gina :D I'm so glad you liked it and I'm relieved that my first ever review was such a nice one. I'm also relieved that you didn't think Lily was OOC. The incident was meant to have been completely out of the blue for her, hence her surprising reactions. To be honest, I didn't plan on the blonde being in on Sirius' plot, but it could make sense. In my head, she was just another younger girl with a crush on him, and he was using her slightly. He would have had to deal with the fallout afterwards, but I think he would have been too carried away by his plan to think that through. I would hope that he at least tried to make it up to her at some point :) -Sophie-