Ahhhhhh I can't take it. Its too good. I must leave a review. Reviews on a tablet is quite annoying to type so I never do it. But you have forced me, with the amazingness of your stories, to do it. Three times! God I love your stories.
Author's Response: Thank you so much. I really appreciate all these reviews and am glad you liked this story. ~Carole~
Aw! This is so cute! I love that you used characters we don't know much about, and really gave them personality, cause honestly, who is Susan Bones except that one Hufflepuff girl? Really great.
Author's Response: Thank you. Although, I'll venture that Susan Bones is more that just that one Hufflepuff girl. She's also brave enough to join DA, fight at the Battle and loses most of her family to Voldemort. I like writing minor characters though because there's much more scope for stories. Thanks again. ~Carole~
Thank you so much for this! It's exactly what I needed and it brightened my day. It is sweet, and it's also perfect and exactly the type of happy ending which I'm a sucker for.
And thanks to you, I have a new fondness for Anthony Goldstein now.
I love it so much! ~Lea
Author's Response: I like happy endings, too - hee hee. Glad you liked it, Lea, and hope you had a lovely birthday. ~Carole~
Hi there! Sorry it took me so long to read this, but I'm glad I finally did because I love Anthony Goldstein now! My Ravenclaw boy! Seriously, I love what you've done with him. It's nice to think there might be boys out there as sweet as him. Oops, there's the word. ;) I also like what you did with Susan. She was not good at everything, but still strong about it - and even better than Anthony recognized it! The bit with him replacing her lip balm was wonderful.
So a question about Hannah and Terry. Why does he always get the shaft in fanfic, for one? LOL - he was such a lecher here! But more importantly, is this your head canon Hannah or was she more someone you needed for this story? I suppose people grow and change but I can't see this Hannah marrying Neville Longbottom. Then again, I don't know if her letting Terry do all that stuff - in front of their friends!! - is a product of her personality or a lack of self esteem. So I'm curious what you were thinking when you were writing her.
A lovely story for a lovely person. HAPPY BIRTHDAY, LEA!
Author's Response: Hmm, this is my head canon Hannah and I disagree that Neville wouldn't have gone near her. This was the same girl that went to pieces in her OWLs, who believed Sirius was a bush, and thought Harry was the heir of Slytherin. She's 15/16 here and 'in love', I think she has the right to be a bit idiotic. She's actually pretty like I was at that age, tbh. Neville at the same age was ... okay he was a Gryffindor, but he wasn't a particularly impressive one until the DA and then that seventh year. He was very ordinary. I think he'd see in Hannah a girl that needs a bit of protecting, but also one resourceful enough to run her own business and is more than a match for him. I don;t buy into the Neville sex god after the Battle that so many people think. BAMF - yeah, but that's not his true nature. He's sweet and true and I think hannah's like that. Sorry, I'm a bit touchy on this - ha ha. have you read my Drannah - can't remember - but this is the prequel, I suppose. Sorry about Terry, for some reason I think he's a bit of an idiot at 15, but he redeems himself in his year seven. Um, I don't think what terry did to her was so bad. they were snogging- much like Ron and Lavender and she thinks he's funny. I don't think her self-esteem is that low, she's popular because she's smiley and pretty - that's all. Hannah would like Neville because she'd appreciate his essential goodness. (Merlin, when I think of the prats I went out with - hahahahahha) ... Ummmmm
Sorry, this has turned into me getting ridiculously defensive and I shouldn;t have done because I appreciate the crit - really I do. when I write my sequel to Drannah, which will feature Neville, then that will fix my Hannah canon in my head a little more.
Always a pleasure to read your reviews, even when you touch my touchy nerve - heee heee heee ~Carole~
Oddly enough, it was the lip balm thing that I could relate to the most. I don't wear lipstick or lipgloss or anything like that; just good old lipbalm, sometimes chapstick.
I also could relate with sticking to "one flavor." I have this weird thing about green tea lip balm. Once my mom convinced me to get cherry instead because it was cheaper...and I hated it! So I can see why Susan was worried about making "the wrong decision."
In the end of this story, Susan and Anthony are talking about how Susan and Mandy can be compared to the lip balm that they wear. But in truth, I think that it should be Anthony who is being compared to this. Susan is worried about making the wrong decision if she tries anything new, and I think that this might be a connection to that.
Author's Response: I only like mint lip-balm or chapstick - ha. Yes, you're right, there is a connection to Anthony preferring Susan - perhaps he needs to be with someone less flighty and steadier. Perhaps they are both boring - although I don;t think they are; they just appear boring to other people. Susan isn't actually that sweet, she just appreciates sweetness in others (like Hannah). Thank you very much for reviewing. ~Carole~
The name suits this story perfectly. However, despite being so very sweet, (and I sense that I may end up overusing that word here…) it is not cloying or sickly. Your Susan is very different to how I would have imagined her, going by the descriptions of her aunt. We see so little of her in canon that this hardly matters though. Your opening comments on the teachers were amusing, with spot on characterisation. I felt a little sorry for Susan; even her Head of House mixes her up with Hannah.
The contrast you created between them must make it even more irritating for her to get mixed up with Hannah. Their choices in lip balm are surprisingly revealing. You’ve hit upon a very original and effective plot device (if that’s the right name for it) there. I was surprised by how silly, if sweet, Hannah seems. I wouldn’t have pegged this girl as Neville’s type. Maybe he needed someone sweet after going through such hard times though.
I guess Hannah’s taste in men must improve over the next few years if she ended up with Neville. I wanted to slap Terry Boot several times, especially for the “bon-bons” comment. He makes Anthony seem even nicer by contrast. Admittedly, the line about the brooms did seem a little sexist, but then he was only quoting Terry. When he speaks for himself he seems much nicer, and funnier.
When Susan said “I bet you thought Hufflepuffs were all sweet and innocent”, it really made me smile, because I had already been thinking that she doesn’t fit with my idea of a stereotypical ‘Puff. I like her sense of humor, and Anthony’s too. It saddened me slightly to see how little attention your characters paid to the house-elves though. They were so sweet, and then got so little attention in return. I have a soft spot for the elves, in case you haven’t guessed.
I loved Anthony’s inventive way of not cheating. I was so pleased for Susan when she got an acceptable. Their nerves and doubts felt very natural, and it made me even gladder about what came next. It was so, well, sweet of Anthony to get more lip-balm for Susan! He went to a lot of trouble, and she clearly needed the confidence boost that it gave her. They make a lovely couple, in a lovely story. Sometimes, I need a little fluff in my life, and I reckon this is a pretty great place to get it. Well done (yet again) :)
Author's Response: Hmm, I'm not sure Hannah's that silly. She's 15/16 and 'in love' so she's a little mushy, I guess. (Reminds me of me at that age). The thing I always think about Hannah was that she was the one that went topieces during her OWLs, but probably grew up very fast when her mother died and during that last year at Hogwarts. My personal feeling about her and Neville is that there was a part of that helplessness that Neville liked about her, then he saw how much she'd changed - much like he had from the scared of his own shadow boy that he was for 6 years. Um, sorry, that became a bot of an essay on hannah - ha ha.
Glad you liked the lip balm idea and also the fact that there isn't a stereotypical Puff. With Susan and Amelia. We don;t know if they're blood related. Amelia could have married a 'Bones', but even if they are related, it wouldn't necessarily make Susan as bright as her aunt. (I'm not bright but have a very intelligent son, for instance). Anyway, I basically like to write her as not what people expect, so ummm.... that's why I did - lol.
Oh, good point about the house-elves. I really should have written a bit more about them. I sort of assume people don;t like them (although I'm very attached to Frinkle who has appeared in a few other stories of mine) But I should have made more of that scene (I was in a rush) because Anthony would have been more interested, I think, although Susan is used to them by now.
Thank you so much for the review. Sometimes I need to write a bit of fluff - ha ha.
Awww! I love this! *Nearly crying because it is so 'sweet'*
I really understood this Susan and the lip balm was a really lovely touch. I also felt that it was good that she wasn't good at most subjects because people tend to do that as her aunt Amelia is a high-ranking Ministry Official and also assumed to have been pretty good at everything.
The two best friends couple thing did seem a tiny bit cliche but it worked well enough to get these two together.
I'm also very glad that you showed, no, proved, that Hufflepuffs are not the fandom stereotype. I loved the house-elf touch too, and to be honest, it was very nice to hear about some Ravenclaw guys. Although perhaps I don't hear much about them because I'm not reading the right thing to hear about them.
It's so lovely that two people with 'no sense of humour' can make each other laugh, because it also shows that there is no 'no', just 'different'.
I wonder what else Hortensia Adams had to say about Susan if she said things about Mandy...
Author's Response: first off - THANK YOU for reviewing. I was really ambivalent about this story, but sometimes sweetness and fluff will out. The best friends dating best friends is a touch cliched but I can't see them double dating and in my canon Terry and Hannah don't last that much longer - ha! (The Untrodden Path sort of fits with this)
If you want to read some good Ravenclaw boy fics then I must steer you towards ToBeOrNotToBeAGryffindor, who writes brilliant stories about rather a lot of them.
Frinkle is my own personal house-elf invention that I'm rather fond of, so I'm glad you liked them. I wanted to show that it wasn't just the Gryffs that managed to get into the kitchens, I'm sure the Puffs knew how to get in.
Yes, they both had a sense of humour, it was just cleverer, I think, than Terry and Hannah's.
Mmm, Hortensia's opinions ... maybe Anthony shouldn't pay so much attention - hahhahah.
Thanks again. ~Carole~