Reviews For 2 Trees
Reviewer: Equinox Chick
Date: 07/26/13 4:03
Chapter: Chapter 1

Begs the question ... what happened to Voldy's wand?

Digressing before I start the review, classy, Croll, real classy.

Natalie, I think this is an amazing poem. Your imagination here is wonderful, and you've written an amazing story in verse (and so few words). I remember you researching this, and your attention to detail shows in each verse. But what's most impressive is the way this flows. Parts are like a mantra (especially the repetition of 'Yew and holly rise to meet.' and so it begs to be read aloud.

I also adore the way you've interweaved the characters of the wandholders into the wood. Harry shines through here:

As holly shields its love from chill, And when this love it burns again,

I have no crit but do have a suggestion. Could you write something - either poetry or prose - about wandlore pertaining to Ollivander and also Albus Dumbledore?

~Carole~

Author's Response: CROLOLOL!

This review was such a pleasant surprise! :D I will write the poems, of course, but only because you asked me to :) :-* hank you so much!

Reviewer: Nagini Riddle
Date: 05/27/12 4:15
Chapter: Chapter 1

My favorite line was that both were baptized by the Phoenix feathers. It makes the wands take on a life of their own, which we know is not impossible since the wand chooses the wizard. Plus, being baptized refers to being cleansed of sin, and since Phoenix tears have healing powers, it works, then, that the wood would be baptized. And then it becomes a battle between good and evil... The yew wand took on countless sins while the holly wand continued to be "baptized" because it strove for what was good. So, what I'm trying to say is that your diction was flawless in this piece, and served to be quite powerful.

Author's Response: THANK YOU! I'm so pleased you commented on this :)

Reviewer: Gmariam
Date: 04/12/12 16:03
Chapter: Chapter 1

Wow, that is so original. Very, very cool. Rather epic and Tolkien-ish, too. I loved the structure and the formatting, that was great. And I really loved how at the end you are not just talking about trees or wands, but the characters. I always like rhymes, so the rhyming couplets were a great way to punctuate the ending. The word 'tussle' sort of jumped out at me as not quite fitting - it seems too weak a word for the last line, and maybe 'battle' or 'meeting' would work for your intent and convey the same idea? If not, leave it. It's a gorgeous poem and I'm glad to have read it!!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thank you so much for the suggestion, Gina! "Battle" does sound a better fit. I am thrilled that you read and liked this, as I know you aren't a huge fan of free-verse. (Although, it does rhyme in the end :D) Thank you for reviewing! <3

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