Reviews For The Healer's Heart
Reviewer: Dad
Date: 05/19/12 10:49
Chapter: Chapter 3

This would not normally be my sort of story, but in this case I was just sucked in. Well written and original.

Author's Response:

Would you believe I get that a lot? My author page is covered in stories with reviews prefaced with 'this isn't the type of thing I normally read, but...'. I take it as a compliment, so thank you for that.

I'm glad you find it original. It's hard to write stories that people haven't read before in some other fashion. I hope the rest of the story continues to be a pleasant surprise. Thank you for the read and review. :)


Reviewer: Ribe featherquill
Date: 05/19/12 9:29
Chapter: Chapter 3

I really like this story. It's not that much we know about Mongus in from the books, but it's enough. Your charaters are well made, and the storyline are, as well as I can tell, well though out. Pretty fast update by the way. I look forward to the next chapter.

Author's Response:

One of my favourite things to write about is that which has little or no canon fulfilment, giving stories to things that might not have one. This story was supposed to be a quick romance with a bit of background, but I really enjoyed adding plot and substance to it.

Thank you for reading, and there should be an update in another few days. It's already written, so it's just waiting to be posted. :)


Reviewer: Verita Serum
Date: 05/18/12 0:15
Chapter: Chapter 2

I almost did not click this, because I just really have no feelings in regard to Michael Corner, but the way you've written him has me very intrigued.

Great job so far, I'm looking forward to the next chapter. - AG

Author's Response:

Well, hello!

I make it a point to make people care about characters who are otherwise a nonentity. Everyone has a story to tell, and the ones no one else takes are the ones I want the most. Somehow, I end up with Ravenclaws and Slytherins a lot, but their stories can be fascinating in their own right. I'm glad you have thus far found this one interesting. Thank you for reading!


Reviewer: sam_1034_lily
Date: 05/16/12 2:26
Chapter: Chapter 1

Wow this was really good. I can't wait to read what you have in store next!

Author's Response:

...I see, right after I post a new chapter. I must be a mind-reader.

I'm glad you enjoy it. I have the whole story written already, so it's just a matter of posting. Stay tuned! Thanks for visiting. :)


Reviewer: The owl
Date: 05/14/12 19:37
Chapter: Chapter 1

Love, love, love! I guessed pretty early on, about the time of Daphne’s conversation with Astoria, why Theodore was so unresponsive to Daphne, but that didn’t detract from the satisfaction of the reveal. Anyway, going back to the beginning, Daphne’s opening thoughts drew me in instantly. Her distain for the men she is surrounded by and her talent for insincerity made her rather intriguing. I confess, I tend to read more stories about ‘nice’ characters, so she, as a true Slytherin, if not necessarily a ‘bad’ one, makes a nice change.

Theodore was endearing, and your use of ‘puppy dog’ seemed to me like it would have been better suited to him than his rivals. He almost reminded me of Neville at the Yule ball, trying not to step on his partner’s toes. Daphne comes across as very cold and calculating, but her closeness to Astoria stopped her from coming across as too stereotypically Slytherin I suppose.

The details about Persephone (lush name by the way) and Tiberius Bole were interesting background, and I liked seeing a little further into the family dynamic. When you first mentioned the sisters’ deadline for marriage, it seemed like their parents must be to them like the Blacks were to Sirius. However, this detail helped to humanise them. Moving on, the more I read, the more I pitied Theodore. He seems to be nowhere near a match for Daphne, certainly not the way she sees things. I will be interested to see how much he grows in her estimation later on.

I liked your use of “slobbering” “ it made me think back to the “testosterone-soaked puppies” from the beginning. I was impressed that you managed to keep Daphne’s blindness about Theodore convincing. She is a character who generally understands others, but she is used to getting what she wants. Here, I guess her selfish motives were enough to make her ignore all the signs suggesting that for once she wouldn’t get what she wanted.

Even when seducing Theo, her mind seemed to be on wealth, with concern for his robes of all things at the forefront of her mind. I was surprised by how well I could empathise with her cold calculations, which is testament to your skill at writing her. The balance between creating a strong character and creating one that is likeable has to be managed carefully, especially with one like Daphne, and for me, you have it just right.

The idea of Astoria walking in on Theodore in a cupboard somehow didn’t surprise me. It seems a very Astoria thing to do, even though I know absolutely nothing about her. However, there is an Americanism here “ “coat closet” “ that jumped right out at me. I noticed you using British spellings elsewhere (“favourite” for example), so maybe it’s worth changing this for consistency’s sake.

My pity had moved from Theodore to Daphne by the end. The tripling of “bruised, cowed and vacant” made me shiver. Daphne may not be the best of people, but no-one should go through that. The last line was very effective too. I just wanted to hug her where Theodore left off. I think I have rambled enough now, so to finish, I will say that this is a great opening chapter. I think that this story has a huge amount of potential, and you haven’t even mentioned Michael Corner yet! I’m hooked.


Author's Response:

Well hello! Honestly, I wasn't expecting this story to get very many reviews, and I wasn't expecting one of this depth. Thank you for that. :)

This story is already complete and waiting to be posted, so I hope it lives up to the expectations you have about it. My beta tells me it's great, and the couple people I know who have read it say so, as well, so here's hoping.

My favourite type of characters are ones of moral ambiguity. Things that are repugnant to some may be business as usual for another, yet they could both consider themselves upstanding people. It gives me a warped sense of satisfaction to write about characters discovering uncomfortable truths about themselves, which I suppose makes me one of the aforementioned ambiguous numbers. Anyway...enough about that.

You seem to be getting the characters as I wanted them to be at this stage of the story. Yay for that. For the most part, this was supposed to be an introduction to Daphne and her situation, and you will be meeting Michael in the next chapter. I think his character is probably my favourite in this story, so I hope he will strike readers as such, as well.

I don't know if Daphne is supposed to be likeable so much as understandable. While her perspective seems to be left of centre, her thoughts and priorities are reminiscent of her status. She's a rich girl with rich girl problems -- first world problems, if you will. Clothes matter to her because they were made to matter to her whilst growing up. Her marriage deadline...also a big deal. In comparison to everything else that happened in the previous years, these are probably nonentities in society, but to her, and to Theo, to a degree, they still matter because they always did before.

As for coat closet, I'm pretty sure that my beta missed that (she's British), but I *think* it was originally 'coatroom' in my first draft. No idea why I changed it, but considering I wrote this whole story in two weeks, I'm not surprised it didn't make it into the final draft. Must poke/prod that later.

I'm glad you enjoy the story. I'll probably be posting a new chapter tomorrow and keep that pace until the story is finished. Thank you for your lovely words of encouragement and support. It means a lot, especially since I've never interacted with you before outside of perusing the reviews you've left for a few of my friends on the site (a good thing, by the way). I look forward to future dealings. :)


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