Reviews For Tendrils
Reviewer: majestic_ginny
Date: 05/18/12 8:54
Chapter: Tendrils

Kara, this was really nice :). I felt myself completely drawn into the story by your descriptions. I love how Lucius was characterised; DH proves that he does care about his family, despite whatever he is, and that flows really nicely into your story. I also felt really sad for Lucius and Narcissa; it feels that this might be the reason why Narcissa is always so melancholy. The last part also made me feel like crying; but then again, I also felt slightly mad at Lucius because if he felt that way for Dobby, he could have treated him better.

I do, however, have a nitpick: In the last line, it says, I forget that Harry Potter is a boy of eleven years. Harry is twelve, not eleven, although that might be a mistake on Lucius' part, not yours. But still, as Draco is nearly thirteen, so is Harry; I think Lucius ought to know that as Harry and Draco are in the same year.Other than that, this is a really nice story, you had me hooked :D --Nadia

Author's Response: Oh no, I can't believe that I'm only now getting around to replying to your review! I'm really sorry I left it this long!

First of all, apologies, and thank you so much for the fantastic review! And especially the nitpick. That was of course an error on my part - I know that I pondered it but for some reason put this as Harry's first and not his second year. So it definitely was a mistake on my part! I fixed it now. Thanks again!

I've really grown to like the Malfoys since the end of the book series. Especially in DH, they are so close and there is so much love there... Again, thanks for the review! It does mean a lot, and if you ever leave me another, I swear I won't take so long!

Reviewer: Gmariam
Date: 05/18/12 2:11
Chapter: Tendrils

Hi Kara! Lovely story! Well, it's very sad, really, but well done. It's also very original, this idea of a lost twin. I thought you handled such a sensitive subject well. I thought Lucius was very in character in thinking first on finances, and then in not knowing how to help Narcissa with her loss. I loved the image of Narcissa tracing tendrils on the blanket, the wall. It made a perfect title. I confess I was not quite sure of the connection with Dobby at the end, particularly the final paragraph that sees Lucius lunging at Harry. I wonder if one more line or two might tie it together a bit more. But that would be my only minor quibble. I really liked it and wish you luck in the challenge.
Oh, and HAPPY BIRTHDAY!!!
~Gina :)

Author's Response: Ginaaaaaaaaaaaaaa Thank you very very much! The fourth drabble was the one I was struggling with most- I mean, with including it. I should have written something different, haha. But maybe it works as a sort of epilogue, right? I wanted to link it to canon somehow. I know that it doesn't work perfectly... Maybe after the challenge, I'll find a way to add a line or two and make it a bit tighter. Thank youuuu for reading and reviewing, and welcome back :)

Reviewer: Envy_I_May_Be
Date: 05/17/12 12:08
Chapter: Tendrils

Wow. This was amazing. This story was captivating; very emotional. I loved it!

Author's Response: Yay! Thank you for the review!

Reviewer: PeppermintToads
Date: 05/17/12 0:28
Chapter: Tendrils

This was a really great story! It was very sad, but I liked it a lot. I love stories that give character insight like this, and I wonder what Draco would say if he knew.

Author's Response: Mmhm I wonder too, but I doubt they'd ever tell him... Thank you very much for your kind words, it means a lot!

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