Reviews For Pieces of Her
Reviewer: PeppermintToads
Date: 06/07/12 20:24
Chapter: Chapter 1

I liked this very much, even though I wasn't sure if I would at first. It seemed very sad, and I can't say that I cared for Astoria very much, but it was overall very good writing.

Author's Response: Thanks!

Reviewer: Gmariam
Date: 06/06/12 1:03
Chapter: Chapter 1

That was really good, Julia! I thought it flowed really well and built the relationship between Astoria and Demelza nicely. The parts during the battle were especially great and defined Astoria clearly. It was also quite heartbreaking, as were several other scenes, like the one before Astoria gets married. But I like how you ended it, with "It means something." There's a bit of hope, and not just for Demelza. I felt more sorry for Astoria, denying herself the ability to follow her heart.
Lovely job, as always! ~Gina :)

Author's Response: Thanks so much, Gina :)

Reviewer: Equinox Chick
Date: 06/03/12 7:35
Chapter: Chapter 1

Every time I hear that song, I think of this. First it was the drabble, but now it will be this story. This is so perfect, Julis, so, so perfect. ( a prose poem of perfection :D)

There was, I confess, a part of my unsure this would work as a longer story (despite me nagging at you). Some drabbles are perfect the length they are, and then some need to be expanded. This, however, works sublimely in both forms.

What I love especially, is that you've been able to expand Astoria so much more in this. The was she's struggling with who she is, her selfishness, and her cruel honesty. I wanted to shake her, but then at the Battle she'd right. Demelza is all high ideals and swirling fury, and she knows she has to get out of there.

I was heartbroken for Demelza after the scene in the Hog's Head and really hated Astoria for being so crass as to suggest she becomes her bridesmaid. It was, however, sadly in character for her, as was the apology late and the tears when I think Astoria realised just what she'd lost.

Okay, this is going straight to favs, and probably has a QSQ nomination coming from me (unless a certain elf has beaten me to it :) )

Brilliant and thank you so much ~Carole~

Author's Response: Thank you so much, Carole!!! Yes, I've tried to expand a few other drabbles from the brawl and they just haven't worked in a lengthier form. Some things are just better short and sharp. It can make them that much more moving or funny or powerful. But I'm glad you thought this one worked. It was interesting giving more character to Astoria. I wanted to give more flesh to her, and more reason for the divide between them. Again, I'm so glad you like it! Thank you for this wonderful review. I'm grinning from ear to ear xxx

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