I love it...so pretty, yet so meaningful.
Author's Response: Thank you very much. ~Carole
So I gave poetry a try. I've been reading all sorts of new things at the moment, so I thought, why not? This was featured and I though, even better! I already know I lover (and her writing :P)
Now I'm crying all over again like the first time Fred died on me. Thanks. I'll never read poetry again!
Anyway, everyone seems to be quoting One young forever; one young no longer and while I agree that it is a beautiful line, I much prefer the one below it.
Enterprising young men - all enterprise lost.
Honestly, I know sweet FA about poetry but I know this line makes me sad! I like the use of the word lost. It really hits it home with a blunt bat. Poor George. Poor Weasleys.
Everything is lost :(
Author's Response: Lexxyyyy, thank you so much for the review. I really appreciate it especially as you're not really one for poetry. Yeah, I still tear up a little when I think of George without Fred :( . Thanks again ~Carole~
It's a well known fact that I know nothing of poetry. But this moved me, Carole. You captured both their spirit and their tragedy in only a few words. Well done. Congrats on the win, my friend. :)
Author's Response: Thank you very much, Lori. I'm pleased you read and reviewed because the fact that you say you don;t know anything about poetry and yet enjoyed this enough to leave a review means a great deal. BTW, it's rubbish because you know what you like and what you don't, poetry just happens to be more subjective, that's all)
Thank you very much :D ~Carole~
If reviews are golden, then "Enterprising Young Men" is invaluable. :D
This was beautifully written, I really wish Fred hadn't died. The penultimate (hah, I love big words! :P) line really sticks, and it leaves this massive impression. I can't get it out of my head- it's ringing "one young forever; one young no longer"
When I first got to the part where we find out Fred died, I kept on reading it over and over again, just because I didn't want to believe it, and that I was sure that I'd read something wrong. :( I can't reread the books and not have the thought that Fred (and everybody else I love) will ultimately die.
This captures the whole picture of the twins, a shot-by-shot of their lives. Congratulations on your QSQ award! This definately deserves it. :D :D :D
Author's Response: Thank you very much. I have to say that I tear up at the thought of Fred dying as well as Remus and Tonks. It seems so unfair! I'm glad you enjoyed the poem (or perhaps enjoyed is the wrong word - appreciated is a better word). I felt very sad writing it. I was truly gobsmacked to get the QSQ for Best poetry because I know how many fantastic poets there are on the site. This was a real honour. Thank you again. ~Carole~
Carole, this poem never ceases to amaze me. Every time I read it, I think back to when I first read it in PA and it still hits me as hard as that first time. I read my favourite poetry over and over and over. This is one of my favourite poems. Poetry should be moving. It might make you laugh, it might make you blush, it might make you nostalgic. It should always evoke a response, no matter how trivial it seems - and you draw out such a strong response with this poem. The joy, the hope, the grief is all so natural. You capture the spirit of Fred and George perfectly, transitioning into the gut-wrenching sadness of the end.
Carole, you truly deserve the QSQ. I love your poetry and always look forward to seeing what you come up with in PA. Never stop being fabulous.
Author's Response: I have delayed responding to this review because I really can't find the words. Coming from you, Julia, this means an incredible amount because you're possibly the most talented and informed poet that I know. (Obviously I hob nob with WB Yeats all the time :D and can tell you he knows nothing!)
I loved this challenge. It was so hard at first, but challenges always make me think, and this one was no exception. Thank you again. ~Croll~
Wow! And the golden review goes to... JK!
I agree with everyone else in that this was magnificent. Especially those last two lines that stand alone. So much emotion is wrapped up in so little words... Profound impact! Great job. I stand in awe...
Author's Response: Thank you! I was rather pleased with the way this turned out especially as when I tried writing it in a more conventional style it didn't work at all. ~Carole~
Umm, you do realize we are all praising you to the skies in order to mollify you enough for you to update Lions? :P :P :P (jOKING, LOL)
Author's Response: Hahahahahahahhahahahahhahahaha - you are very very evil. (and I know I am a bad bad woman) ~Carole~
"One young forever; one young no longer." Breathless. Beautiful line.
Author's Response: Thank youuuuu. Wow, I'm stunned at the reaction this poem is getting. I nearly didn;t post it - ha! That line makes me shiver as well. ~Carole~
Author's Response: Thank you!
That's really cool! It's so much like a bit of prose written about them, and yet still so poetic. I liked the barest bit of form you gave it, and in particular things like "the devil's dancing hands. Playing their tune..."dragon skin jackets and shoes black as onyx." or "Cantering the furlongs" - just so many strong bits of language and imagery.
And the last two lines are so sad. *sigh*
Author's Response: Thank you, Gina. I do like prose poems, which look as thought they should be easy, but take as much fiddling with as a sonnet - eeeep. I very nearly didn;t post this because I was wary of the reaction, but am so pleased I did as am in shock at the reaction. Thank you so much for reading and reviewing. ~Carole~
That is really really good. And really bittersweet. :)
Author's Response: Thank you very much. The reaction to this has both excited me and rather shocked me. :) ~Carole~
This broke my heart! Right after describing how brave and reckless they are, it talks about Fred dying. Nevertheless, I thought that it was extremely well written. The line "One young forever; one young no longer" really stood out. Great job (as usual!).
Author's Response: Thank you. OOH, this seems to have made people sad. And, yes, it is sad, but what a glorious 20 years they had together. ~Carole~
Oh my word, that's so sad! I think I read it too quickly, but it really hit me, especially those last two lines.
One young forever; one young no longer.
Your writing is so emotive. I'm a bit sad now...:(
Author's Response: OH, sorry to leave you sad. :( It made me rather sad when I wrote it because I always feel so sad for George and Fred, too, for missing out on so much. Thank you for the review ~Carole~